The Shut Up and Write Awards 2024 [CLOSED]

🧛🏻‍♂️ Creatures of the Night (Round 1)

Welcome to the first round results for the Creatures of the Night Category.

Fire_And_Ice_1813 Black Fire
Through to the next round ✅

"Pros:
I must say you have done a good job giving us a heads on about the world building and characters before starting the story.

I love Iris, she is a character anyone and everyone will love. She is witty, fun and keeps her feelings to herself. You have done really well characterising her. Her wolf has a charming nature like her. You made us feel her emotions really well.

Cornelius too seems nice, I don't know but there are things about him making me curious so I shall wait and see.

Michael is a douche, lol. Sorry but you did a good job making me and every reader hate him. His behaviour change was shocking and does make the plot twist worth it.

Areas of improvement:
You have the chapter as Iris's POV, and though we know she is Alexa, I would advise you stick to one name.
You give us a lot of information at once, info dumping if I term it. It isn't necessarily bad but blocks any reader from remembering and processing all of that at once. You can break it down, keep it slow so people enjoy and remember it as well.
Another thing that caught me was the sudden change of her emotions after waking up. I understand she misses her mom and sister and is bound to feel sad, but the switch could have been in a much smoother way.

Also, there are a few spelling mistakes and capitalisation errors like Greated instead of greeted, Freak with the letter F capital in a sentence. "

Abbadh_Books Lunar Destiny
Sorry this book has been eliminated ❌

"I read your story today for these awards and while I didn't notice any obvious spelling or grammatical mistakes, I did catch a few things that need improving.

• When writing a blurb there are a few things a writer needs to include. The first, introduce the characters which you have done, but I can't see the stakes which are important. Who is Tessa? She sounds important to the story as she's mentioned in the blurb but we need to know something about her. For all we know she could be a random woman he met at a bar in Magaluf.

• I'm sure you've heard people say this when it comes to writing. Show instead of tell. When you describe something, a person, a plate of food, or anything, it's is better to show the item/person with enough description rather than just tell the story. A good balance of show and tell is what is needed to become a great writer.

Maybe a read for read book club would help you with more feedback on how to improve"

DomiSotto Totally A Vampire Thing
Through to the next round ✅

"Pros:
The three chapters in we can see the blue glow mentioned by the second chapter, so I applaud that.
Zoe is absolutely charming, cute and loveable. MC's like her are worth it.

Cruz is nice, warma dn evry staright with his words. The only thing we know of him is a woman's close proximity causes the blue glow to emanate from him but how he saves Zoe from the idiots rampaging her is a green flag indeed.

Also, Corazon is smart af!

The grammar is perfect with no mistakes whatsoever.

Cons:
It doesn't seem like a vampire story from atleast the first 3 chapters. A high-school romance? Yes. Engaging? Yes.

Vampire or any mention of them whatsoever? Nope. Not yet."

QueridoEve Lycan Legend
Sorry this book has been eliminated ❌