This is the list of entries submitted to my September Writing Challenge - SPECIAL MENTIONS. The writing challenge started on Facebook, here is the link:
https://www.facebook.com/kallmegaudier/posts/pfbid02gzBjM86cEzXdnqvwY9w7bDdhZGYFXZjW6LdjQjSYTb6G...
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Relevance to the Prompt: Prompt #3 | Jojeane unknowingly revisits her darkest past through a memory injection.
Writing Quality: The writing is powerful and emotionally charged. The imagery is vivid, especially during the darker moments, and the pacing keeps the reader engaged. However, a few moments could benefit from further clarity. The ending delivers a strong, haunting conclusion.
Creativity: The story is highly creative, combining futuristic memory technology with a tragic, psychologically gripping backstory. The twist—that the memory is not someone else's but Jojeane's own—makes the narrative stand out.
Overall Lesson: The story explores the inescapability of trauma and how past horrors can't simply be erased or avoided. No matter how much Jojeane tries to drown her pain in distraction, she cannot run from her past.
Rating: The story succeeds in delivering emotional impact and a strong sense of dread. The protagonist's internal struggles are compelling, and the dark twist that the memory she injects is her own adds an unexpected and terrifying layer. The concept of memories as commodities is used effectively, and the tension is built skillfully throughout. While the pacing is generally good, certain details could be clarified, especially in the initial description of the memory store. The abrupt transition to Jojeane's traumatic past could be smoothed out for a more seamless reading experience.
This is an impressive, emotionally charged story that plays with the concept of memories in a dark, psychological way. The protagonist's journey from seeking escape to being trapped in her own past leaves a haunting, unforgettable impression.
