Cover and Title(CHANGED): Okay, since reading all off the book after doing your cover review, I finally realised why you named your book 'Grey'. Just I don't even want to talk about my stupidity.
I love your new cover, it look so much more better and professional than your original one but move the K.Jennings more in the middle. It is uncentred, perhaps make it smaller to put onto the page because it looks very squashed and 'uneven' per se.
Blurb : Okay. Okay. Is isn't too bad. Why is it too bad dressinggownmadness? See, this is why I was worried about reviewing certain peoples book - there is nothing to bloody say about it! It actually made me feel something in my cold emotionless heart - damn you dressinggownmadness!!!! BUT hahahha, I can't give you all the credit BECAUSE there are one or two commas that shouldn't be there. HA.
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Story :
The first thing I see is 'Hope' and I was thinking awww what a nice little chapter heading despite the lack of it saying the actual chapter number BUT then I see it is a quote. Let me educate you for a minute. IT IS AN EPIGRAPH. Yes that's right an E P I G R A P H. A quote before the story to hint at the plot is an epigraph. :)
I kinda had to vote on the prologue... you should feel like - appreciative or something. That sugar is rare. EXCEPT for the mistakes said down below.
Oh okay - the title is referred in the story... Mh. You proved me wrong *Gives Gold Sticky Star Hesitantly*
You used too much 'I's in your prologue. I know you want to make it more personal and stuff but Stop Using So Much I's.
I feel as if you should introduce Nathan more - so he just came up to a house thinking it was his friends and now they are magically laying eachother? Oh - that's normal I guess for my generation (Of course -i'm not like that. I spend too much time on Watt pad) Introduce that sexy beast and actually describe what he looks like. Describe that shit. Description is key.
Wow. The end on chapter 2 - damn. That legit scared me. I'm not even kidding... *Clicking violently onto 'next chapter'.
Is it weird that I jumped a little? i was just like - "I walked down the - BANG . I killed you motherfudger!"
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WHY HAVE I GIVE YOU TWO VOTES????????????
I just spent my time reading until chapter 9 until I forced myself to stop. I'm not at all like that but you just so much emotion into it. I am actually saying nice things - help me. STOP. I am reading on later but for now I need to get on with your review...
