*Listens to Emperors new clothes. "Lets get this review started!"*
Word Count : 1202- Well that's embarrassing
T H E P H A N T O M W H I S P E R E R
Cover :
Putting '#Wattys2016' in the title just doesn't fit. You sound too desperate for reads. You should put it in the blurb or put it as a title instead of 'authors notes'
I had this whole big thing wrote out for the cover but then I had to change it since you changed the cover haha, anyway on to the new cover review ...
It isn't the best ... but it isn't the worst either. What I mean by that is that it could be better.
I think you used too much of the one colour but I do however like the font you used, it adds some sort of effect towards it and I find that the whole cover in general is much better than the previous cover, its got a sort of 'Magical T.V. show' vibe towards it for some reason though, because of the font. I don't know why it reminds me of a tv show ha but it looks good so there's that!
Something doesn't look right though ... I think you should get your designer to make the writing one size smaller and the authors name smaller again because it seems very crowded and 'pushed in' together.
Once again, you changed the cover and the title, so I'm not redoing it again.
Blurb :
Now, before I say anything else, separate the short blurb into at least two different parts. No one is going to want to read.
Now I just realised you did separate them but you made an indent on the second part but didn't on the first paragraph. Why??!?!?!?!? Don't indent one part then not do the rest. Also put an extra space between the two so the reader will actually see that you made an effort to space out the writing. A space would be all that you need to make it look so much better.
'The Kraken' - it would sound better and looks more professional in quotation marks, it just has a more professional feel to it.
The second part seems like a mouthful so I would add more onto it and the rest in general because it is such a short blurb so a little more wouldn't hurt.
I made a few changes that I think would loo better on your blurb;
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Intelligent and cynical, Darius Prince is the personal driver for ruthless crime lord, 'The Kraken'. When he's tasked to clean up a grisly murder, the crime scene forces him to consider where his loyalties lie.
One thing leads to another, and Darius finds himself stuck on the brutal path of vengeance, whilst having his buried ties to the paranormal world unearthed through the arrival of an enigmatic shinigami. (Add more?)
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Cover by the amazing @ShadowedRain
Warning: Contains original interpretations of religion and religious leaders - Solely for the purpose of the book. Also contains strong violence and profanity.
