Lesson 1 :
In other book with more detail
Lesson 2 : Description
Look at the following lines;
"I looked over at his eyes, they were very nice and attractive to look at. There was a sort of individuality and inviting tone in the clear blue eyes. It drew me to them."
"To Aoife, and many others probably, his eyes dazzled and seemed to sparkle in the suns illumination, one glance at his delightful, playful eyes and her own eyes seemed to gleam. A sort of individuality, softness and an inviting tone in the clear blue eyes made any girl's heart melt - it allured me towards them.
Things that I changed
You tell me!
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Lesson 3: Too many I's
"I felt so lonely. I needed him when I was in my darkest days. How can I go on? I really need to stop feeling so sorry for myself. I need to stop it. I need to look out for myself - I, not him."
"Loneliness has overwhelmed me since he had left me in pieces. How is it possible to go on anymore? However, feeling sorry for myself is just making me worse - I need to stop it. I need to look out for myself; I need to look out for myself..
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Lesson 4: Homophones *Constructing*
You're / Your
You're an illiterate person.
Your paper is over there, filled with illiterate words.
Lesson 5 Trust spellcheck *Constructing soon*
Lesson 6 A comma before and?
There are three primary uses of conjunctions:
If you are connecting 3+ items, a , is optional.
E.g.
I bought cheese, crackers, and drinks at the store.
Should I eat dinner, play a game, or go to the store?
If you are connecting two independent clauses, a , is always used.
I hit my brother with a stick, and he cried.
The rain stopped, and the sun came out again.
Should I eat dinner, or should I play a game?
When a coordinating conjunction is used to connect a dependent clause, a comma is never used.
Eg.
The boy ran to his room and cried.
Frank is a healthy and active child.
Should I eat dinner or play a game?
