The Fault In Our Mary Sues

Elija Leona Quezada by ishipsthings + 10,000 Views

Oh my gosh, thank you all for 10,000 (now 11,000) views! I'm so ecstatic! I'd like to thank everyone (about 55 of you at this point) for submitting to me! Out of all the Mary Sue books on Wattpad, you happened to open mine.
In celebration, I've uploaded a book! Finally! Yay! Check it out if you want, as I've spent over a year working on it to be honest.
Anyways, here is ishipsthings' OC! Hope you enjoy!

Fandom: Original

Yesss.

Basic Information Section:

Full Name: Elijah Leona Quezada
Nickname(s): never given

Good so far. Assuming they have no nicknames.

Gender: male
Species/Race: human/hispanic
Age: 13
Birthday: December 12
Sexual Orientation: bisexual

This is all good. I would personally capitalize 'Hispanic' though.

Personality Section:

Personality: loud, tsundere, awkward, very sensitive, but overall a very happy person,

Looks like you wanted to do more there.

Oh, here is one of my pet peeves: using words like tsundere, yandere, deredere, etc. to describe a character's personality. They consist of multiple things, things that you could have just put in the personality. Please stop using these words. Thank.

Anyways, this is... a problematic personality. First off, a 'tsundere' is described as a character development process, in which a person is hostile towards a person of interest but then soon shows a kinder side over time (found on Wikipedia). What's the problem with this? Well... 1) It's cliche and overused, and 2)It's contradicted in the personality. There are multiple types of tsundere. It's not that cookie-cutter.

You also can't just list off a bunch of negative traits, but then say "overall".

Sorry for the long rant. Let's continue.

Likes: food, animals, acting, reading,
Dislikes: bugs, running, being interrupted, and seafood

Again, looks like you wanted more, as do I. At least add one more to each, but if you don't want to it isn't really needed.

Hobbies: hand to hand combat, reading, and trying to draw
Dreams: to live a happy life with a kind lover

A tad cliche in the dream department but okay.

Good Habits: always a good listener, will never betray you, almost never gets mad

A habit is something you can't control. "Almost" wouldn't be the right term for this. These also aren't exactly habits.

Bad Habits: very forgetful, not always honest, speaks loudly

Need more. The forgetful part is pretty cliche as well.

Strengths: very flexible, has good pain tolerance, and pretty good at hand to hand combat

This part is good.