About the book
How I found this book: author asked for review
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Summary: I remember this.
House no. 159
What??!!!
'Who are you?' I asked.
'Definitely not a human.' He replied.
Ray is a new student who came to our school. After he came, things started getting weird. I planned to spy on him. But it ended in a disaster.
Who is Ray? Is he a weird orphan who comes to school or is he something else?
Read the book and find out.
Author: @HorrorGiver
Content
Comedy: 2
Drama: 2
It's a horror story so not that much drama.
Violence: 6
Romance: 1
Action: 7
Influence: 1
Swearing: 5
Overall plot score: 8
Grammar
Punctuation: 10
Capitalization: 8
Subject-verb agreement: 10
Run-on sentences: 8
Proper usage of words: 10
Spelling: 10
Sentences that make sense grammatically: 9
Consistent verb tense: 8
Overall grammar score: 9
Overall
Overall: 8.5
Feedback:
The plot was a bit too fast-paced, but I guess that makes sense if you have 16 chapters. For a horror book, it's really important to build up suspense, so I would suggest writing a longer book and slowing down the story.
I enjoy horror stories, and I think your plot is amazing, but like I said earlier, I would've liked more suspense. Introduce James and Daniel in the first two chapter, bring in Ray in maybe the third or fourth chapter, make him seem normal for a few chapters, slowly talk about his abnormalities in the next few chapters, then write around five chapters on the ending scene. To elongate the book, try adding more dialogue, describing classes other than math, maybe even adding in some comedy during the school day. I would definitely love to see that!!!
I'm sorry if this review sounded kind of harsh!!! Here's some ice cream and cake to make it sound less severe!!! 🎂🍦 *scolds myself for being so rude*
(I think I've been reading too many of @joymoment 's books. Guys, I have issues. 😩 *sings to self* and one of them is how bad I need you 🎤)
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