Crown of Blood and Jewels Yelverton_TheGeek_
Cover
You already know I love the cover.
Title
The title is a little long, it doesn't really jump out or make me want to read.
Summary
Your summary is an overload of information and needs to be simplified a little something along the lines
Hugo Chance faces a race against time to find two artifacts that control the gates of hell.
Allied with a conflicted spy, an unstable hermit, and a girl desperate to find her father, his treacherous journey leads to a startling discovery.
Everything he knows is a lie.
This version gives it an air of mystery. Leaves the reader curious to find out more.
Chapters Reviewed
I love the idea and plot. I think you should continue the story however I would suggest reading through what you write. The flow is off in both prologue and chapter one.
There are some errors but they can easily be fixed.
There is some telling rather than showing. I know as you progress and evolve as writer you will improve.
YOU ARE READING
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