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 Dont underestimate the powers of a goddess. That was what Allure was always told. Some were said to bring misfortune upon those who dared tried to win a fight that was impossible to win. When She met the Guardian of life she was utterly amazed. Mostly amazed at how Mortal she looked. Allure was under the impression that it was looked down upon when a god or goddess came to the mortal plane. But here SkyFire was, The most powerful goddess in the Universe, Staring right at her. She repeated the sentence in her mind.

When SkyFire made eye contact with Allure, She froze. Unable to move. Those amber eyes glowing. Amber? She could've sworn her eyes were pale red. She must be using magic. She spoke one word. "Welcome." The words that came from the Draco's Maw were chilling. Chilling as her scales and the ice that plated them. What the cause of them was? That was unknown. When Allure found her voice again, She spoke the only word she could hope to speak without being killed or gaining her misfortune.

"Hello, Malady," She spoke Her voice trembled with her body. She was taken aback when The drake sighed at the title. She looked towards the wall.

"You have no reason to call me that," She turned her gaze back to Allure. Not to her face, But her shoulders, "Interesting little Alder," The words made Allure shiver. Every word SkyFire spoke chilled her to the bone. She expected SkyFire to have a booming voice, Not one as quite as an owl's flight. the terror must of shown,"Almost as powerful as I, and yet you still Cower in fear." She looked towards the central pillar,"There is no reason to be afraid of your own shadow, Young one." The she Disappeared into a thin mist.

When Allure exited the temple, She was met with Many questions. "Did it succeed? What did she look like?" Tempest, Despite being a whole century older than her wanted to know the appearance of a Thousand year old Goddess.

"She was the most beautiful person I've ever seen." She didn't know what to say other than that. It was nearly Impossible for her to Say anything else. It's true though, I have never seen someone so beautiful yet so intimidating.... She shook her head and decided that the best thing for her to do was to go to bed. Tempest thankfully didn't Push her for more Information. She walked back to the small camp where Gilbert and Avis were. When they asked how it went, she just held her hand up, and laid down. She fell asleep instantaneously.

Her thoughts were of confusion. What did Lady SkyFire mean by Almost as powerful as her? There was no way she could ever be Her equal or even come close. Just what was this newfound power? It felt as if energy came pouring out of her every breath. It all confused her. She would ask Tempest about it the next morning. She would just have to wait for an answer then.

When the morning came, She found herself alone with Gilbert. The woman look ecstatic to see her awake. When Allure sat up was when she spoke,"The others went back to the temple an hour ago." She looked in the direction of the temple before continuing,"Something about trying to summon SkyFire herself." Allure Yawned.

"I thought only Females could do that," She stretched her Wings, wiggling the claws on each one of them. Each prehensile claw, an extension of her will. It didn't settle well, that it was possible for her to be an equal to the goddess oh so powerful. She looked at the scholar.

"As did I. Hell, I even tried to point that out to them, but they were too stubborn," Gilbert crossed her arms over her chest. An act that showed she felt vulnerable. It was a rare action, only doing it when she was alone with Allure.

Allure let her thoughts drift, Leaning against the side of her tent. She thought of these Alder powers, Strength that she still had yet to master. Even after three years of having it. Maybe she would ask SkyFire to teach her. But what would she have to give in return? What had she done to obtain these powers in the first place. She had a suspicion it could of been the Prismatic dragons. If she brought it up with Gilbert, She would shut down the idea. The scholar didn't approve of Divine intervention, She believed it to be a wrong thing to do. But if She brought it up with Avis, He might understand. Understand that the dragon that Allure previously rode before she obtained her first pair of wings, was a prismatic dragon. Then, then she might get some answers. There were so many unanswered questions in her mind.

She always knew Just what the prismatic dragons did. They Gave the world Land upon their deaths. The first Great dragon died and it's body turned to the Dragon and Wyvern territories. The territories that she had once called home. Dying while swimming, The first great prismatic dragon was a serpent. The second great dragon Died while talking to the third, Looking in the opposite direction for just a moment before realizing that his soul was no longer in his body, and that his body had turned to the land of Light and dark. The tail becoming the Elven forests, and the face and neck becoming the Serpents mountains. The third Great dragon, and the longest living Died many years after his brothers. It was said that he died while taking his last sip of water from the sea of life. His tail creating a trench, His footprints becoming the Neutral territories and the residence of Humans. His head becoming the Island Allure found Tempest on. She called it the unknown. It was always such an interesting story.

There had been rumors. Rumors that the last great dragon had been incarnated. As a spirit the Third roamed the forests of the wyvernblood's territories. That legend proved true, Her parents had told her. When prism was born and chose Allure herself as her rider. And now he was stuck back on the Dragon territory stuck in some volcanic rock because he tried to protect her.

It was soon after that, that she met Avis, Gilbert, and all of their friends. And not long after she left the human territories, did she find herself on an island unknown to all. Only to meet another Wyvernblood. Tempest was initially hostile at her. Being in the form of a Dalamadur takes a toll on both sanity and energy. She knocked him out, He lost all of his energy at once. Once he woke, he begged her to spare him. She didn't have the heart to kill him. It turns out that he didn't even remember how to be human again. So she was stuck teaching a century old Wyvernblood how to hunt, Walk properly, and mainly just the basics of being human.

It was three years later, that Gilbert and Avis appeared on the island, alone. Allure contemplated driving them away in her complete form, but decided against it. It wasn't a good thing to do to her friends.

Allure Shook off the memories. Now wasn't the time to be dwelling, There was work to be done.

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