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Your cover gave me a false sense of security and I liked it. The cover is pretty, makes you think it's going to be your ordinary angst love story, but that's not what your story is. I love the fact that the cover is misleading almost. Makes the plot twist even better. I also think the title plays into that.
| S Y N O P S I S | I don't think your synopsis does your book justice. In your synopsis you set up for there to be a plot twist, I think it would be even better if you didn't talk about it there, because then the readers wouldn't see the plot twist coming. I expected a plot twist because you told me there was going to be one and it kind of took away from the mystery a little bit.
| P L O T | I enjoyed the plot a lot. I like how the plot twist was interwoven throughout the story. For a second it felt out of place and then when I thought about it all of the connections were there. The fact that she'd known she'd lose a part of herself when he "died" and the fact that Miguel's thoughts were always focused on her wellbeing. The signs were there but it wasn't obvious until it was and that was so amazingly done! I really loved the end of the last chapter where her reality becomes blurred and the psychosis starts to seep in. You executed that so well! When I was reading that passage, I had to reread to pinpoint where things started to change and I think it's really clever that readers essentially mimic her thought process. I had to check when things started to change and so did she. Also the interweaving of Miguel's personality and hers. That was really well done!
| C H A R A C T E R I S A T I O N | I think your characterisation was really good! In the montage in the second chapter I really felt like I got to know your characters well. Miguel was jokey, didn't take things too seriously. Claire was bold and sassy. Not only are your character(s) fleshed out well but I think the way you did it was a nice touch.
Upon reading the ending I like the way you characterised the characters even more. Miguel was everything that Claire needed to cope, he was easy going and loving. Claire didn't have a loving and easy childhood, so Miguel really was the concealed part of herself. He allowed her to love herself and have fun. She said that he was like a 12 year old (or something like that) so in a way he acts as her inner child, healing her in her adult life. It just blows my mind that you are able to create such depth in so few chapters. You are extremely talented!
| D I A L O G U E | I really enjoyed your dialogue. It always felt purposeful and whether they were saying a plot driven statement or not I always felt like the dialogue told readers a lot about how the characters felt and their personalities. I especially love the line where Claire says something a long the lines of "aren't you going to kiss me now." Which I thought was really well placed.
