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Tenth

The Great Pretender
ParkDC
TeenFiction

Disclaimers and Points:
• Read only three parts
• This my opinion and I will not speak in behalf of all readers
• Contains spoilers

Feedback of user anxieazi:

The author used First Person's Point of View, which is fine. I don't have problems with it. Since typically stories are written this way so I won't further with this more.

Ang una kong napansin sa unang kabanata ay ang relatable na way ng pagsusulat. It makes us wants to fit ourselves and gain that comfortability with it's main character.

I'll focus with Kirsten first and foremost as she is the focus of the story, obviously. Isang typical adult to be girl, I mean woman that have this mindset of knowing or exploring what she wants to really be in the future. Again, it is relatable. Kirsten's character is someone you can compare yourself into especially if you have that confusion with how to figure out your life after college and the real world.

Simple lang din siya sa pananaw ko na hindi kailangan ng extravagant description to make her real for the readers. Isa pa ay nakakarelate rin ako sa kaniya na medyo awkward sa mga taong hindi niya naman kaclose talaga. It's hard to be friends with someone you know is kind of different from who you are. For me the author characterize her well and of course character developments are flexible with her as the story goes by.

Now with Dein. Sa totoo lang hindi ko inexpect na lalaki pala siya. Which is a good job by the way. Sa kaniya lang ako medyo hindi pa clear sa akin. Maybe the author wants him to appear mysterious for the readers? Though, I can't feel him yet and kind of not into his character yet. He's okay since he really is a good friend to Dein that's all.

Mag-barkada lang sila or best friends? Hindi pa kasi ramdam ang closeness nila sa early on chapters.

I'm not going full technical with this one. Napansin ko lamang sa unang kabanata, ang salitang pula na medyo malalim. I mean I know what that means and it was really obvious too. But at some point there are words that aren't that used a lot or maybe we should make it simple for it to understand more?  Siguro bumagay naman siya sa pangungusap maybe do some explanation about it at the bottom if a reader somehow didn't know it's meaning.

Malinis naman ang pagkakasulat at madaling basahin. Choices of words are good too. The dialogues are fine and not that confusing. Some might just be not that showing what we wanted to see in that part but it can disregard just fine without making a big deal out of it.

Honestly, I'm not seeing the relationship with the title yet. The Great Pretender, maybe because I'm just on my starting point, 'no?

Kasi if we look into being a pretender is a really big word for someone who just afraid to loosen up or not an open book person. Personally I'm not that type of person who open up easily and I have that attitude of not showing my real emotions but I'm not gonna say I'm a pretender, it's just a personality. Though, maybe Kirsten really gonna get to this point where she'll pretend or mask her emotions more? Nakita ko pati sa description so I'm getting where the idea is.

Now with the Plot. It's not really new or unique to be honest. It's simple without the complicated conflict yet. I'm not clear with the main one too so I can't say a lot. It's like the day to day routine too in life so I appreciate it. May times na unreasonable lang para sa akin or siguro sa simple na concept ay ayos naman.

Naweirduhan lang ako ng bahagya sa pagiging dramatic ni Kirsten sa pagkain ng lunch. Pero siyempre bilang babae iba na ang nag-iingat. Kinlarify ba na hindi gaanong madaming babae sa department nila? Maybe I missed it? Kasi kung nasa cafeteria naman kakain I don't think it's that scary. O kung may trauma na ba siya sa lalaki before? May loophole lang kasi dahil di ko pa gaanong nalalaman ang friendship nila ni Dein, isn't he a guy too?

I get the anxiety of first day of work too so it's relatable and the you don't know a lot of people around you.

Ito pa siguro hindi lang clear sa akin ang settings kaya hindi ko mavisualize ang ibang eksena which is important too.

Mabilis ang flow ng story. It's good in a way that the progress isn't boring. And it's bad because you don't know if you left out something unclear for the readers. Lalo na sa relationship o magiging relationship at feelings ni Kirsten na kailangan ng talagang makita namin ang development.

Again all in all, it's cute and pretty simple for at least from what I've read so far. It was neatly written and edited. The main character is relatable for someone who of course can compare themselves to her character.

Nothing much on the negative side aside from characterization and some structures for the concept.

I won't expand it more since I don't have much resources to comment to. It's good and targeted the right audience.

Experience a very lovely teen romance and it was definitely a must read.

My rating: 7/10

Message To The Author:

I'm sorry, I'm late! Lmao hopefully this is worth the wait and if not at least right?? Lol. More power to you! One basic message but yeah it's finished!

Please comment if I did made mistakes, I'm open for your critique too!

Remarks:

If you can vote my story, EU Raya I would really appreciate it.

12/23/19