Title: King of the ring
Author: cloudsarebeautiful
Genre: Teen fiction
Review by: @mumal16
Cover:
Amazing cover! Love it. Gives a mysterious and attractive vibes. Good job there.
Blurb:
You should work on the blurb because it doesn't seem interesting and I can't even understand what you're trying to tell in it and what is the story about. I can't seem to understand the connection of the blurb with the story. I am not getting attracted to it. Blurb is very important to attract readers and to make them click on the "read" button of your book. So please work on that sweetie. If you need any help with that, pm me.
Plot:
As soon as I started reading the first paragraph, I was in awe. Your writing is so smooth and perfect, it feels like you were born a writer.
Your choice of words- oof, mind blowing! You really had my jaw open at your writing style. The scenarios and descriptions are so amazingly written that I was astonished. Every scene is very perfectly described that it's able to create an image in the reader's mind which is what books are supposed to do. It's creating a movie in the readers mind, very well done.
Midway through my escape, I realised that I was being a coward etc. This is how this sentence in the first chapter should be written. If you want me to inline comment on the book, tell me I'll inform you where this is.
The gentle breeze etc- My hand rose to tuck my hair etc - and this time it was not BECAUSE of the wind. Write because in this sentence.
I love the description she gives of Tobias. It's remarkable! Such a great way to describe a character's personality. It is making me wanna read more about him and get to know him more. Personally, I find his character intriguing and really attractive.
The first chapter ended on the perfect cliffhanger, making the reader jump to the edge of the seat and want to read more. Great work there. I wanna know more about Tobias.
As I read further, I went as kxbdudgeuwoalsndhegwiwknxhskaoaiw HOW CAN SHE WRITE SO PERFECTLY??
I go like this on very rare books and they very hardly catch my attention enough to continue reading the whole thing after 1 chapter. So trust me when I say this, your book is doing wonders and everything felt as if it was happening in front of my eyes.
Why are you even asking for a review when you're writing such a masterpiece? I hardly find any mistakes or anything to point out rather than Tobias' hot intriguing personality, your fantastic writing skills and the mind blowing smooth pace of the story. You're doing a great job sweetie, don't ever doubt yourself and I'm loving the cliffhangers, really!
I love Ariel too, we have so many similarities and I'm loving her character so far! I love that she stays inside and isn't an extrovert, which is similar to me lol.
Everything is going at a smooth pace and I really enjoyed every piece of that story. Keep writing and blessing us with your hard work.
I'm not even sure how to make this review long as I couldn't find one single flaw in the book. Hats off to you and I have to say, you should teach me your skills.
Thank you for being amazing and sharing your work out there for us.
YOU ARE READING
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