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blueey_[ t i t l e ]
8.5/10-good title! connected na connected 'yung story sa title.
[ b o o k c o v e r ]
8.5/10-it's nice pero mas maganda kung white 'yung color ng font para makita agad 'yung title (optional) kudos pa rin sa gumawa ng cover mo!
[ d e s c r i p t i o n ]
9/10-noice one, nakakaintriga 'yung dulong sentence na he ain't true.
[ p l o t ]
34/35-it's unique, kaso for me lang po ha, you could make it longer, nabitin ako! pero it's really fun to read.
[ w a y o f w r i t i n g ]
33/35apostrophe + spacing
-magkahiwalay 'yan ha? it should be sa akin or kung gusto mo siyang gawing isang word, palitan mo ng apostrophe 'yung 'a'. sa'kin/sa 'kinHumarap ka sa akin/sa'kin/sa 'kin at ngumiti.
-mayroon/mayro'n hindi po meron
anong mayro'n sa'yo/sa 'yo/sa iyo?
mas lalo akong nagtaka roon.
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