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Things that are numinous seem holy or spiritual and mysterious. In addition, your story is quite mysterious. The name you have chosen, is just one word, which right away sets the mood of your story, therefore, I say, it's very well chosen. 10/10
Description:
Your description is quite promising. The prophecy is told in the description, from which we know what to expect and honestly, after reading it, I honestly expected a lot from your story. You wrote that part, like a mystery, that will be solved in the book, which is really good and that wakes my interest in your story. The description also shows in what year, your story is going to be. 20/20
Cover:
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On the Cover, we see a woman, with a sword and a staff of a magician (I forgot what they are called). The woman is standing on a cliff, with a big dress. The whole concept is really aesthetic. The colours you chose, are probably also a reason, why this looks so aesthetic. I was immediately drawn to the book, because I want to know, who this is and what she is doing. The sword is also something, which let's us know, in what time your story takes place. Great Job. 23/25
Plot:
I really love the thought you put in this story. She went from "I'm going to school." to "I will safe you all." It's an interesting plot honestly, which also contains the "shook" moments like when the readers find out the truth about Kiara. In addition, I love how the Aiden reacted after finding out, what had happened to his twin brother and I really like how those friends all held together, during such a hard time. 27/30
Implantation:
I liked the character development you put in the characters, mostly the development from Aiden. It's amazing how he was super mysterious and angry, for no reason, at the beginning and ended up opening up little by little, making him become one of the favourite characters of your book. Sadly, I think that you are stretching the story a lot. That is good for some people, but for me personally, it's one negative point. 32/40
Writing-Skills:
At the beginning, you took your time to write detailed, so that the readers could imagine everything in front of their eyes. However, you only held up the concept for the first chapter. Right in the second chapter, you changed your style into writing directly and fast, moving on quickly. I would advise you to keep up one style, from the beginning. Because if you keep changing that, then readers would get confused weather if there are two people writing it and it is just not pleasant to read while shifting to different styles. 25/40
Grammatical-Aspects:
As you might have noticed yourself, in your Comment section, you have many punctuation mistakes. Moreover, at some point, I would change a few words in-between the sentences, to make it better, to read. I mean, in a few phrases, you should've used other words, to describe actions and feelings. 15/35
Concluding:
Concluding I would like to say that your story is really interesting and unique, just the grammatical part ruins it a bit. Still, I believe, that you are really giving it your best and I can tell you from my experience, that you will learn more as you write. Therefore, keep going.
PuppyBonus: +10
Total: 161/200
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