MY FIRST STORIES

Paper Cut

(A) When I was 12 years old, I was cutting a paper sculpture with a cutter (paper knife). (B) This was for an art project due the next day, so I was in a hurry. (D) I was cutting a difficult part and had to cut vertically instead of horizontally (the safest way). (C) I must have put a lot of force because I went down to fast and ended up stabbing myself in the other hand. (E) My mother heard the scream I made, and we went immediately to the hospital. They had to do stitches because the wound was very deep.

Autor note: I was told that the story was so straight-forward, but I often use so many details and wanted to do the complete opposite :/ I don't know if I like it though.

Instructions: Write a very short story - not more than 200 words - about a trip to the doctor or dentist using the ABDCE structure. Identify the structural elements in your story. My example is provided below:

One night when I was eight years old I opened a bag of Doritos to eat while watching television. (A) Doritos were my favorite snack to eat as a child. Nacho Cheese was my favorite flavor. (B) I loved sitting in the dark hearing the "crunch, crunch, crunch" of the chips. I'd sit there, crunching my chips, but didn't eat the chips with a napkin (what kid does?) and would forget about the powder that accumulated on my fingertips. As it got later and I got sleepier, I kept rubbing my eyes, my fingertips covered in Doritos Nacho Cheese powder. (D) When it was time for bed, I went to brush my teeth, looked in the mirror, and saw two large bags under my eyes. The Doritos Nacho Cheese powder had pooled into two large sacks underneath my eyeballs. I started screaming and crying. (C) The next day, my grandmother took me to the doctor who put industrial strength eye drops into my eyes to flush out the powder. (E)

Remember, the action in this story isn't the actual doctor's office visit. The action is what LEADS you to the doctor's office.