Carmel Reviews {CLOSED}

𝟖》𝐋𝐄𝐓'𝐒 𝐏𝐋𝐀𝐍 𝐌𝐘 𝐌𝐔𝐑𝐃𝐄𝐑 - 𝐇𝐀𝐓𝐓𝐈

"Let's Plan My Murder" by shwetakumari426

Reviewed By: Bluelovesleep

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Title: I really loved the title! It's really intriguing and quickly raised a lot of questions. I think it's a clever title and quick to get anyone's attention. I found myself drawn to the story just from the title.

Cover: I don't like this cover. It's too bland for me. Romance covers tend to only have a couple on the cover and that is nice but given the fact that your story involves people planning murder I think it could be a bit darker. I don't think the font of the title is the best, and the face of the man thrown on the cover looks weird. The author's name is hard to read given the color of the image chosen. You can look for graphic shops and ask to get your cover done! Or you could try to work with Canva!

Blurb: This blurb was so good; it quickly gave me high hopes for the content of the story. It's really well written. The readers get the information they need before they dive into the story, which is good. As someone who struggles to write blurbs, I feel like I should get some lessons from you.

Opening Chapter: There's too much happening in this chapter. We have all the details about the characters, from relationship drama to appearance. It's too much. I honestly got bored of reading because things were simply being said instead of finding out about that. I know describing characters is extremely hard, but in this case, I don't think we needed the main character to describe her boyfriend right away. I think it would be better to do it once he shows up. Also... instead of telling us her age and what she does for a living, maybe showing her doing that is a better option. Showing is better than telling. I know it is hard, but it's something that a lot of people struggle with and they make sure to get better.

Dialogue: The dialogue between the characters was good. It felt realistic and I never found the need to roll my eyes at something one of the characters said, which is amazing.

Plot: The plot was fine. It wasn't something that I would read because I was deeply invested in the story, but I could see myself reading it if I just wanted something lighter to escape my reality. I can see a lot of people finding the plot interesting due to all the relationship drama around it, but that's not something that I find appealing.

Characters: The characters felt a bit bland, most of them felt like stereotypes to me. That's something that needs a little more work. I know it is hard, it took me a year and a half to create the characters for my story and I am always finding something that needs to get better so they can feel like human beings. It might take a while, but I know you can do it.

Grammar/Punctuation/Vocabulary/Spelling: I don't have much to point out about your grammar. It was good, easy to read and understand. The description was really good, and it was easy to picture the events on my mind.

Originality: The whole thing of someone helping a person to plan their murder is an interesting concept. Dark, and daring. I just think that you could add more details about the character's life before the drastic decision of taking her life. You just said what was happening instead of showing it. Maybe longer chapters might help to develop her daily life. I would like to read those events happening, instead of being told that they happened almost every day.

Overall Impression: I like the concept but like I said there are a few things that need to be polished. I would suggest you rewrite your characters and give them more details, their flaws, and the things they are good at. Romance stories are mostly character driven, and if the characters are just stereotypes and bland there's little to it. I like to imagine my characters in all types of situations and write how they would react. Maybe if you tried that, it could help you to write better characters. I know you can do it!

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