Black Gold Reviews - Closed For Catchup

Review V

Reviewer:ebrus999

Author:faithjessica8

Book title: girls chill and chat on fb

Title(2/5)

"Girls chill and chat on FB"
honestly when I read this title I was like 😒. I really wasn't expecting much from the book afterwards. I think the title does not do justice to this book at all. It's like " Yes I get it,  the book is about girls chilling and chatting on FB" but it's so much more than that.
So try think of something more creative that doesn't sell the story short.

Cover(4/5)

The cover is beautiful, it doesn't relate much to the story but it's simple. Not captivating though but it does a fair job of representing the story.

Blurb(5/10)

It was okay I guess,  it lacked thrill and excitement and drama. A blurb is like the first sip you take from a drink if you don't like it, it will be difficult to down the rest.  But in all the blurb does justice to the story. It's just too plain for me.

Character development (6/15)

If you want to write a book with a lot of characters like this one,  Then at least leave the first chapter for character description! It not necessary to have a character aesthetic to give a good character  description. Let's take PAYE Madison for example,  yes you to some extent you portrayed the fact that she was mean but is that all she is? For Kate is she a social butterfly or an antisocial person? Jacob, is he the typical school jock or not? And what are the age level that we should be looking at? These are stuff you don't leave to the readers imagination. Help us understand you characters,  help us love them more.

Plot and flow of the story(5/15)

The plot is very original and authentic  but when it comes to the flow of the story I can't say I'm impressed. For example in the first chapter we witness Kate's encounter with Jacob and it seemed like she didn't want anything to do with him then six chapters later without any activity to show their closeness he's suddenly mad at her for being friend zoned.
Try to add more relatable events and keep the story at a steady pace.

Creative and writing style (10/15)

I love the fact that you used emojis  in the chat places,  it makes it more original  and your story is so relatable too like I once met an India dude of about 85years sending me inappropriate pics that's something people can relate to. Though your writing style is a bit confusing as I seem to get lost in the change of pov's. Please try and fix that.

Vocabulary (7/10)
The fact that you used simple words that are easy to understand is amazing but to add a bit more excitement you could substitute the regular words for more exciting ones.
Like said to yelled, barked, etc
Look to gaze, peer, scan etc.

Grammar and spelling (5/10)

The grammar and spelling mistakes are very numerous and they ruin the reading experience. Maybe ask some friends to reread your story and help in pointing at the errors or find a good editor on wattpad to proofread your book.

Interactions with readers(5/5)

I love the fact that you replied to as much comments as you can. And the appreciation banner at the end of each chapter is amazing.

Overall enjoyment (7/10)

Looking past everything else I really enjoyed the story. I'll totally continue reading.

Total score :56/100
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Hope this review helps

Ebrus999💕💕