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Reviewer: rabisworld02
Author: @BTSsmumuJK BTSsumuJK
Heartless JJK
Title: 3/5 The heartless shots of the story and plot but the phrase "JJK" is making you look like a rookie writer. I would recommend you to change that.
Book cover: 2/5 I personally think, Jungkook's picture should sharpen up. As it is a Jungkook ff but his picture is not that prominent. Besides the text font and colour, both should be changed. Maybe make the size bigger and use the majestic font.
Description: 6/10 Nothing catchy. What I meant to say is, you described the whole story in description and this type of plot is overused by many. It is not capable enough to catch the attention. You can use dialogues from your story to make it interesting.
Prologue/first impression: 2/5 Not much delighted. It seems like a typical school crush and cheating love story. A d the emojis you used doesn't pit good impression at all. Please consider removing them.
Plot: 13/20 This plot is overused. I mean this is cliche. Many have written on the plot like this.
Flow: 9/15 Too fast it is. Sometimes things should be explained in detail but you skipped that and made the reader feel the story is too rushed.
Emotions: 4/10 You need a lot of improvement on this factor. Where I should have written my teeth, I didn't feel anything.
Grammar/ Vocabulary: 10/15 Your grammar is OK but it can be better. If you want to use any vulgar work like jerk or any other word, please write it full instead of "je*k" it gives wrong vibes and doesn't give a good impression.
Creations: 3/5 Not much. There were not any specific twists too. It was a plain story.
Dialogues: 4/5 About this I have to say you did well.
Overall: 2/5 I hope instead of getting disheartened, you will consider these points and do well in future.
Total: 58/100

Reviewer: rabisworld02
Author: @_kookiewifeu _kookiewifeu

Book: Silly but cute
Title: 4/5 It matches the story and is cute and unique.
Cover: 3/5 However about Viber, I would recommend you to use different don't colour and style, especially for And. 
Description: 8/10 It was good and capable enough to catch the reader's attention.
Prologue: 2/5 About this, I was so excited to start the story, but I was disappointed when I read the first chapter. It was blunt and without any dynamics. You should have started it with a specific dynamic or background. And the emojis you used are not official. It makes you look like a rookie writer and not appreciated generally.
Plot: 11/20 It's quite common and overused. It also has many gals in it such as not telling the backgrounds, surroundings. These things are supposed to make your points high. Please try to focus on the scene and the surroundings of the characters.
Flow: 7/15 It was too rushed and without any pace. What I meant to say is you showed a lot of time skips and breaks. Please try to avoid them.
Emotions: 7/10 It was good. I laughed at some parts of the story but still, you need a lot of improvement.
Grammar/ vocabulary: 8/15 Your grammar is average and have mistakes of tense in the story. After that your you should also work upon your vocabulary. You should not use emojis and keywords like, telling about a slapping scene you should write the whole scene instead of just writing slap. (it's only an example)
Creations: 2/5 This story or plot is overused by people and you simply pulled it off like others. No specific twists or something which can make this story stand unique.
Dialogue: 4/5 About this section, I would like to say that they were well chosen and well suited. Overall: 2/5
Total: 58/100
(Note: I don't mean to be rude. I have read your works and I have found that you have the potential to be a writer. Don't be disheartened by my criticism. It is only to make you motivational. Use my words for your motive and do it like a pro in your next work. Hope to see a better version in future.)

Reviewer: rabisworld02
Author: @Rhiminmin Rhiminmin
Book:Loving him 
Title: 3/5 It matches the story or not, I can't tell it. Since the author has updated only 6 chapters. It doesn't explain the purpose of this name.
Cover: 3/5 I personally think, it is simple. You should use a bit more elements. Even though the words are placed in well-suited order but still, it is not enough eye-catching to gran the reader's attraction.
Description: 7/10 It's good and seems like a Rhyme but it doesn't explain what the story is nor it gives any idea about the story.
Prologue: 4/5 It left me awestruck as it was cute but too short.
Plot: 7/20 It is not described either. As I have said before the author has not updated from 29 November 2020 and the only 6 parts are not enough to grab the plot. However, the vibes it is giving is that it's a plain and common married life love story where another female likes a male lead and tries to break the main couple apart.
Flow: 6/15 Same goes for the flow too. Chapters are short and are not well explained. It has only one scene still unfolding in the first 6 chapters. I would recommend the author update frequently.
Emotions: 4/10 From the published chapters I could predict one thing and that is... You should work on this factor of the writing. Whee, I should have gritted my teeth or feel pain it was nothing.
Grammar/ Vocabulary: 11/15 It is quite good. Still have grammar mistakes here and there but it is good.
Creations: 3/5 Here again. I will say the same. The plot is not unique and it's common. But the certain hints in chapters indicating that something might have happened in female lead life shows that it is interesting.
Dialogue: 4/5 This factor is good and dialogues are well chosen and well situated.
Overall: 2/5
Total: 54/100

@seju_ju seju_vu
Year 5051 
 BOOK TITLE 5/5
BOOK COVER 3.5/5
DESCRIPTION 8.5/10
PROLOGUE (FIRST CHAPTER) 4/5
PLOT 18/20
CHAPTERS & FLOW 14/5
EMOTIONS 9/10
GRAMMAR & VOCABULARY 12/15
CREATIONS 4.5/5
DIALOGUE 4/5
OVERALL 3.5/5
TOTAL= 86
REVIEW: The book title is interesting, the cover is well-made, the description has grammatical mistakes and it could be better, the prologue also had grammatical mistakes, the plot could be improved, the flow of the chapters was okay, the emotions could be portrayed better if the use of better adjectives were there, there are grammatical mistakes all over the book, the writing was creative, dialogues could be more clear, overall the book can be improved.