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@chloesmith chloesmith
Book: Reverie
Title : 3 marks
Cover: 3 marks
Description : 7.5 marks
Prologue/1st chapter: 4 marks
Plot : 17 marks
Flow : 12 marks
Emotions : 7 marks
Grammar /vocabulary: 12 marks
Creation : 4 marks
Dialogue: 3 marks
Overall : 3 marks
Total : 75.5/100
Review: I'll be honest with you, I didn't get your storyline, no matter how many chapters I read. It was a bit too plain and not explained properly. Look, having your own unique plot is the best part but sometimes, if the plot is not very well explained or very plain with no spice here and there, it won't bring out the appeal. The same was the case with your work, it wasn't too appealing. The cover is another dilapidated mess. I think it's too over the top for a reader. Keeping things simple, first start off by using a fresh face claim and don't add extravagant effects to the font, it kills interest. No grammatical mistakes were found but the chapters were too short for my liking at least and weren't that information as well. I see that you tried to create suspense but that too came off way too poor and pushy, getting me disinterested. Try on working a bit more on your writing skills, the rest will all fall into place as there is a little description of scenes as of now.

@Avril_young Avril_young
Book: Stay with me: 
Title: 3 marks
Cover: 3 marks
Description: 7 marks
Prologue/1st chapter: 2 marks
Plot: 16 marks
Flow: 12 marks
Emotions: 7 marks
Grammar/vocabulary: 12.5 marks
Creation: 3 marks
Dialogue: 2 marks
Overall: 3 marks
Total: 70.5/100
Review: The title and cover are plain, not enough to attract a reader. Now, I personally want to point out the flow of your book. How come the OC and Jimin get so well acquainted in the first chapter itself? Where is the character development? Where is the drama and why is everything so pushy to the point where your book looks like a summary of some already published work? There was zero character development and had there been a specific section for it, you'd have lost much more marks. It really irked me to see everything happening with the speed of light, everything was rushed. There's a witch and she turns guys into insects and they are all okay with it? Aren't humans supposed to be scared of such events? The originality again was eaten up here. I really don't think any human in their right mind would be amazed to see their friend transforming into a mole and then back to human again. That's really out of place, it's not the Harry Potter world nor an HP fanfic. People look for sensible things to read, at least I do so I really found your work quite irksome. It totally was, but as it's your story, your plan so I won't say you must edit some initial chapters and scenes but if you want to present your readers with something worth remembering, that's advisable.

Judge: @rabisworld2
Book: Still you
Author: @missemle missemle
Title: 4/5 
Cover: 4/5
Blurb: 5/10
First impression: 4/5
Plot: 17/20
Flow: 9/15
Emotions: 8/10
Grammar and punctuation: 12/15
Creativity: 4/5
Dialogues: 4/5
Overall: 4/5
Total: 75/100
Review: Let's start from, the blurb or better say description. It sounded confusing to me. Let me be honest, it was neither eye-catching nor it was interesting. Surely, it spiked my interest a bit to know what's the story is like but better say, it was not good enough. It will be more interesting if you can add some interesting dialogues or better say some interesting scenes in that as well. It's my thinking and suggestion. The book cover was good. But I would like to say that you can make Jimin and the girl's picture a bit bigger. Otherwise, it is good. Let's come forward to 1st impression. It was good. I felt relaxed and somehow calm by reading this. A good job is done here. But I can't say the same about the plot. Sure, the plot is unique as you have added many elements to it to make it appealing but I will cover the story alone as well as the characters and pace. The pace was too slow which is not liked by many. What I meant to say is you should keep a balance. Sometimes, it felt very slow to the point, it was hard for me to read. But sometimes you managed to keep it good. About characters, I would like to say, you did quite a good job in describing them. They were explained in detail and their mentality, as well as their behaviour, was balanced. About grammar and vocabulary as well as punctuation so you did make mistakes in tenses sometimes, as well as punctuation was not placed well. For vocabulary, you used big and compound sentences for which I would suggest you use to sort and make easy ones. I hope you can consider the points explains above and not take them to heart. You have the potential to be known as a writer.