Judge: MochiSaysLachimolala
1) Déjà Vu by inky_jin
Cover : 4.5 / 5
Title : 4 / 5
Blurb : 5 / 5
First chapter : 3 / 5
Vocabulary : 3 / 5
Grammar : 2 / 5
Plot : 19 / 20
Characters : 9 / 10
Emotions : 7 / 10
Pace : 4 / 10
Ending : 8 / 10
Impression : 7 / 10
Total : 75.5 / 100
Review : The blurb of the book has my heart. It is so beautifully written, and that made me really excited to read the story. However, I really wished the author had kept the same intensity throughout the story. The blurb showcased finesse and a really classy writing style, which makes the story itself seem like a let-down, when compared. There are parts of the story that have similar intensity, with thoughtfully framed phrases, but the rest of the story is just... normal. Nothing special about it. There are grammar errors, the most prominent ones being the lack of punctuation in dialogues, as well as uppercase and lowercase errors. Some unnecessary words were used as well. If we ignore the grammatical mistakes, there is still something that troubles me, and that's the abrupt shifts in scenes, including abrupt flashbacks. I understand that it's necessary, but at times, it just makes the story super confusing to read. I had to reread many scenes multiple times, to understand what was actually happening. The time skips were also super abrupt, with no warning whatsoever. Would recommend the author to mention whether it's a flashback or not, since the italicisation of the words just don't cut it out
2) Don't Make Me Fall For You by NouneSagi
Cover : 4.5 / 5
Title : 5 / 5
Blurb : 4.5 / 5
First chapter : 3 / 5
Vocabulary : 2.5 / 5
Grammar : 2.5 / 5
Plot : 18.5 / 20
Characters : 9 / 10
Emotions : 7.5 / 10
Pace : 7.5 / 10
Ending : 9 / 10
Impression : 7 / 10
Total : 74 / 100
Review : The story has potential; it has potential to be a brilliant story, only if it is executed perfectly. As of now, it isn't. The chapters just seem super rushed, with many typos here and there. Words are unnecessarily typed in uppercase, while some were in lowercase, when it was supposed to be the other way around. Many sentences don't even make sense in the context. There is a lot of tense inconsistency, and errors in subject-verb-agreement. If the author can fix all these errors, the story can be a good one, since the concept is of a toxic MC, which isn't very common. The author should definitely mention when a flashback starts, or continues (especially since the flashback goes on for a couple of chapters without warnings) because I was utterly confused at first when I read the story. The author should also reread the entire book, to see where they're going wrong, and they can probably then consider revamping the book, since it does need quite a bit of work
Cover : 5 / 5
Title : 5 / 5
Blurb : 4 / 5
First chapter : 3.5 / 5
Vocabulary : 4 / 5
Grammar : 2.5 / 5
Plot : 19.5 / 20
Characters : 9 / 10
Emotions : 8.5 / 10
Pace : 6.5 / 10
Ending : 9 / 10
Impression : 8 / 10
Total : 84.5 / 100
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