Creative Writing Mock

November Mocks

Ashton hated being here. In a hospital. He hated the cold, white walls. He hated the sterile smell. He hated the silent chaos; and he despised thay he was there hoping that his best friend was okay.

He shouldn't be in a hospital hoping that Lucien was okay- he should be hanging out with him- like they had planned - knowing that Luce was okay.

He hated it. Loathed it, even.

Ashton had received a call around 3 hours ago informing him that Lucien had gotten into a car accident.
The terror that came with that call allowed him to get to his nightmare location -the hospital- within a time frame of 15 minutes. It being 25 minutes away on an average day.

Everytime he asked of his friend's condition, he was met with the same response-

"Sorry sir, family only."

The answer only bringing him frustration and concern. For all he knows, Lucien could be watching a movie on his phone - barely a sprained wrist on him.

Unable to still his shaking leg, he stood up, pacing through the walls that only seemed to be getting smaller. The smell of antiseptic in the air, evading his senses, overwhelming him.

Needing a breath of fresh air, Ashton slowly made his way down the hall he'd been led through when he arrived. To his surprise, he was stopped by a nurse.
"Excuse me, do you happen to be Ashton King?"

Whatever was left of Ash's composure had been completely shattered as he responded, "Is Lucien okay?! " his voice dripping with desperation. The nurse slowly spoke with a small smile, "Lucien is requesting for you. The doctor will be able to update you on his condition. He's in room 319- down the hall."

The relief Ashton felt at the mention of Lucien's request was uncanny. Barely muttering a thank you, he sped through the hallway, searching for the numbers "319"

He knocked at the door rapidly before dashing into the room, standing near Lucien's bed to face the doctor by his bed's side.

"Ashton, I presume?" the doctor states looking up towards him.

Rather than Ashton, Lucien responds with a croaky voice, "The one and only."

Suddenly, all the emotions of panic, fear and worry turned into anger at Lucien's calm, "What the hell, Lucien?!" Ashton Speaks with a raised voice.
His worry for Luce was obvious, he just couldn't express it directly, at that moment.

Lucien just chuckled lowly in response with an expression that somehow represented a shrug.

They turned to face the doctor who had begun talking, "You really were a miracle case in this accident, Lucien, however, you still have quite the injuries on you. Although, I've already explained the extent of his injuries, I will summarise them for you, Ashton; Lucien has sustained 2 broken ribs; a broken arm, and quite a few wounds caused by the broken glass", now facing Lucien he continued, "There will be a police officer coming in to get your statement when you're feeling up to it."

Lucien looked at Ashton confused before mentioning that it'd be fine to do it now. As the doctor left, Lucien told Ashton that he'd already spoken to the police.

Although it was a strange occurence, they decided not to dwell on it and talked instead.

Aston was relieved. He couldn't bare the thought of losing someone he calls his brother, but he didn't need to think of that anymore.

An hour had passed before a police officer had arrived. After introductions, he spoke in an authoritive voice, "We'll need your statement on the incident, Lucien." Ashton made his way to the door, allowing for privacy before he was stopped by the same voice, "We'll need yours too, Ashton."

Confused, he turned back. Lucien spoke with an unsettling tone to his voice, "He wasn't even there, plus, I've already given my statement at the scene."

The officer sighed-his stern face softening- taking out his phone, displaying an image.

A note.

A strange note.

The men glanced at each other in concern.

"The other vehicle was empty upon searching it," sighing again, he continued;

"This wasn't an accident."

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29/40

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This was made for my own Mock exam for the Creative Writing section. We didn't have to write a full story, obviously, but a solid section would be good enough.

So do be aware that I wrote this with the sole focus of adding as many techniques as possible, while also make it make sense.

So, most of this was unnecessary, but to include semi-colons, colons, lists, triple, foreshadowing, dashes, all that jazz- it had to be included. I tried to do it in a way that didn't make it seem like it was just extra chatter, which is where the foreshadowing comes in.

Yeah that's it, obviously won't be completing this but if you do want to use parts of this on your own tests, feel free to message me or even just ask about certain parts and if I intend anything (like foreshadowing, repetition) or for analysis.

Adjustments will be made in future chapters based on the context example I'm given so like, "Write about a time your were..."

Thanks,
T :)