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Green Eyes | lassie_butter

Title: Green Eyes
Author: lassie_butter

Cover: 6.5/10
despite not being a technical expert in matters concerning designing, i still think that you book cover is, well, messy. the fact the the whole green-ess of it very aptly fits the title Green Eyes; it doesn't look neat. infact, the mis-matched elements kind of hide the whole 'eye' part. i, for starters, didn't notice those eyes until I paid close attention. perhaps you could use some sort of smaller, full-set eyes to make it more clear and direct.

also, the random objects around. at the first look, the moons don't make any sense. PLUS THEY ARE OFF CENTER OH GOD. symmetry is everything in design. until and unless you are superbly talented in it, you simply cannot make the asymmetry work. there is also a random hand coming out of no where on top left: which defeats the whole purpose of a well used cover. you are trying to fill up the negative space and ruining the cover. personally, i believe that if you simply remove the hand, it might look a lot better (using symmetry ofcourse). 

i can't give you my opinions about stickers but i, for once, don't like using them. they distort the cover and throw off the reader. especially in a case like yours where the colour of the sticker is so blatantly different from the theme that it hits the eyes. painfully.

my last complain is the name. there is actually nothing wrong with it, except it isn't symmetrical either. it might also be good if you put a little 'written by' at the top since the name kind of seems out of nowhere. this is, however, a completely optional choice since the covers of my books too don't feature those either. 

title: 4/5
speaking as of before i have read the actual book, the title suits well. it's not very original: after a quick search, plenty of books with the title 'green eyes' popped up and yours wasn't one of them, but then again, it depends on the Wattpad quorum. it works for me.

***

after reading the first seven chapters of the book, i will say that the title is quite apt. it's short and crisp and is easy to remember. it isn't exactly easy to give good titles to adventure books; so good job!

blurb: 5/10
initially, the blurb promised a great start. it was only after i read the first paragraph that i noticed some major flaws. first off, what are you trying to say by the outer world? was Talia home-schooled? is this the first time she attended a social gathering? is this inter-galactic? what is 'outer world'. you might need to specify that a bit more. while i'm writing this, i haven't started the actual story as of yet because i want the review to be as genuine as possible, and thus, you will have to tell me what is the setting of this story. 'outer world' is simply not enough.

another crucial thing you failed to mention was why the green-eyed people were being hunted? why why why? what did they do to receive such treatment? this is an extremely important plot point that has to be mentioned early on. (the antagonist needs to be introduced here.)

i suppose this is a adventure/action book, thus explaining the whole 'seek justice' trope. and i know adventure books use really great words, but don't you think the phrase, "aggressive, callous and powerful mortal's grip"  is a bit too long? by the time this phrase ends, i have no idea what they are talking about because my attention is now just not there. "mortal's grip" was a nice choice of words, although watering it down would work just fine too.

the whole first paragraph is this giant one sentence. rule numero uno: keep your sentences as short and crispy as possible. most of english speakers are used to following exactly what you read and your sentence might make them nervous, or impatient.