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Into The Unknown | mitalip568

Title: Into The Unknown
Author: mitalip568

Cover: 9/10
(before reading)

HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLY CRAP.

wow.

my eyes,,,,,my eyes have been blessed.

it's very rare to come across such simple and yet such artistic covers. it's SO GOOD. the silhouette?????? the person's hair????? the into the unknown things????????? the DISAPPEARING FOCAL POINT???????????? sooo beautiful, honestly. 

though i wished there was more colour so that it'd pop out at a reader but who am i kidding i might cry over the elegant simplicity of this cover. i usually don't like manip sorta covers but boiiiiii was i wrong

(after reading)
yeah, it's relevant. there's a block island kinda situation happening and-- this part wasn't very clear--there's a road. the silhouette is of a girl who looks like she is wearing a backpack. it makes sense.

title: 3.5/5

(before reading)

it's intriguing but hopelessly cliche (i'm on my laptop i'm not going to search how to put that little thing over that e NO). altho i don't really mind the tone the title sets. it's crisp. gives me Disney vibes (duh).

(after reading)
the meaning is not completely clear enough after just five chapters but i think there's a fair bit of allusion here. like, arbmyts is a dangerous and strange place and it makes sense why it would be known as the 'unknown'.

blurb: 6/10 

(before reading)
i get the feel you were tryna go after with this blurb...but it doesn't really hit well tbh. 

there are wayyy to many things that, as a reader, we are coming across the first time and you didn't do the best job in elaborating the plot points. 

problems you need to sort out:
-- why is the twin a stranger? is their name important? are they a reccuring character? in that case, you need to mention the name too.
-- 'last few months / new life' - that's an oxymoron well executed but we need a lil bit more info here too. why exactly is she seeking to start a new life? why is she not content with the current one? this is the part where you could also cover her parents' death.
-- what is abrmtys and why is the journey to it so dangerous? you explain it fairly well in the actual story but try emphasising on this particular point a bit more in the blurb as well.
-- the last line makes absolutely no sense contextually coz of the lack of info tbh.
-- no definite opening line. these are little things which, even if a reader does not end up reading the entire story, make a person want to interact with your story atleast once.
-- no ending mysterious line which would compel a reader to actually start reading like i said above.
-- blurb is too short.
-- quite honestly, i had to re-read it a couple of times because not only there are terms which would make sense only after reading the book, the second sentence is also a bit long-winded. i'm out of breath by the time i finish reading it. this is, i think, your biggest flaw and i will cover it in the grammar section.

i am really sorry if i come off rude btw. i would like say that rude is not the vibe i'm trying to give off in any way.

(after reading):

ngl, the blurb makes a helluva lot of sense after reading the first five chapters. so like, that's good ig but it's not what we're aiming here for.

plot: 16.5/20
okay. i'm actually not too sure if i am the best person to judge this part as i am, personally, not the biggest fan of adventurous stories but am also trying to actively write a story which is sort of...............................................adventurous. so like. yeah.