Name: Sandypebble
Ooo, that's a pretty name!
Gender: She-cat
Cool!
Sexuality: Straight
Okay!
Pasr and future names: Sandykit, Sandypaw
Ok!
Name meaning: Has fur smooth as a pebble
I'm guessing her fur is sand-colored, giving her the prefix? 4/5
Age: 32 moons
Cool!
Clan: RiverClan
Okay!
Rank: Medicine cat
Awesome!
Appearance: Golden tabby with a white tip on the tail. Has a paler golden chest and belly.
Cool! What about her eyes? Maybe more detail like size, body type, fur length...etc? 15/20
Scent: Juniper berries
Ah, makes sense she's a medicine cat! 5/5
Personality: Active and modest. Loves the clan forever. She likes the medicine den tidy.
Cool, but she needs a some negative traits to balance her personality, and more detail. 10/20
Likes: Tidy stuff
Okay, what else? 3/5
Dislikes: Messy stuff
This was pretty able to be guessed from her 'likes', so is there anything more she dislikes? 2/5
Family: mother > Willowsky <she>} Father > Farrowtalon <tom>} siblings > Nutpaw <tom>} Salmonshine <she>} Pebblekit <tom>}
Friends: Mudnose <tom>} Heatherwhisker <she>} Breezepaw (medicine cat apprentice) <tom>}
Enemies: Gingerscar <tom>}
Rivals: Featherkit <she>}
Cool! Maybe add some detail about her family, too?(I didn't say that then so that doesn't count) 20/20
Backstory(birth~): Sandykit loved playing with her sister, this was before nutpaw was born. She was always scared of the others. She was only playfull around Salmonkit. One day she saw Salmonkit playing with the others. Salmonkit invited her to play with them. Mudkit and Heatherkit started to get closer to Sandykit. A few moons later it was their apprentice ceremony. Sandykit, now Sandypaw was the medicine cat apprentice now. She worked really hard. She worked so hard she smelled like juniper berries. She helped Mistycloud, the medicine cat when Mapleapple was kitting. She had two kits. Nutkit and Minnowkit. A few more moons later it was finally time. She was going to be a medicine cat. (Now back in the present days. Good enough? )
Wait, if Nutpaw is her sibling, and they have different suffixes, aren't they not littermates? Or are they? Because if they aren't littermates and Nutpaw is younger than Sandypebble, then it doesn't really make sense that they can be kits at the same time...?
Also, the backstory says Sandykit loved playing with her sister, but then later she was only playful near Salmonkit, who is her sister. I'm quite confused here, does that mean Sandykit loved playing with other kits too, but after Nutpaw was born, she only played with Salmonkit? Also, if that is true, why did she only playful around Salmonkit when Nutpaw was born?
Maybe add more detail? Like why Sandypebble wanted to be a medicine cat, or any other things that happened? 15/20
74/100
Overall, Sandypebble is a great cat! I'd like it if there was just a little more negative traits and detail. Of course, these are just one person's opinions, so you can ignore these.
