Warriors OC Rater

🌷Silverfeather🌷

Name: Silverfeather

Gender: She-cat 

 Sexuality: Straight 

 Past and future names: Silverkit, Silverpaw, Silverfeather,Silverstar 

 Name meaning: she likes feathers and she is silver 

Okay 5/5

 Age: 35 moons 

 Clan:Mossclan(It's fanmade hopefully that's fine)

 Clan info: Mossclan lives in a forest with loads of trees. In their camp there are loads of stones coevered in moss. 

 Rank:Deputy 

 Appearance: she has short silver fur, and has dark gray stripes, her tail is very fluffy, she has green eyes. 

Good, maybe a little more detail? Like her body type, size, etc 16/20

 Scent: smells like the bloom of flowers 

Okay 5/5

 Personality: loyal, emotional, caring, protective, kind and generous. 

She needs more negative traits. 10/20

Likes: feathers, night time, stars. 

Okay, 5/5

 Dislikes:bullies, cheaters, Leafstep. 

Good, but something she dislikes that is not what most cats dislike? Something that she dislikes especially? Sorry if this is really confusing. 2/5

 Family: Mother-Silentsong(gray she-cat with dark gray stripes her eyes are blue,dead), 

 Father-Birdcall(white tom with gray socks and brown stripes has green eyes,dead)

Sister-Flowerpaw(brown she-cat with green eyes,dead)

Brother-Quailleap(brown tom with gray socks and blue eyes, alive)

mate-Midnightflame(black tom with white socks and small white spots on his back he has blue eyes,dead), 

Kits: Nightstrike-looks like his father,alive and Mistystripe-looks like her mother, alive 

Cool. But I don't understand how she can be silver and her siblings are fully brown if neither her parents are? Also, a cat needs to have white parts if their eyes are blue. However, most people don't rly care about genetics(includes me) so that's fine. 4/5

 Friends: Fadingecho-white she-cat with blue eyes Robinstar-orange she-cat with green eyes Darkfang-black tom with gray spots 

Ok 5/5

 Enemies:Leafstep-brown and white tom with green eyes(dead, her ex) 

Cool, 5/5

Rivals:Leafstep 

Good, 5/5

Backstory: Silverfeather was born along with her siblings to Birdcall and Silentsong. She always looked up to Midnightkit who was 1 moon older then her. Silverfeather was very kind and loyal and when she became an apprentice she fell in love with Leafpaw. Silver's mentor was a tom named Jayclaw. One time their clan was attacked by rogues, that's when she lost Flowerpaw her sister. When she became a warrior she befriended 3 cats, Darkfang, Robinstar her leader and Fadingecho. Her brother got the name Quailleap, due to his good leaping skills. 

Silverfeather became mates with Leafstep, she also got an apprentice named Heatherpaw and she treated her apprentice with kindness, she manage to finish Heatherpaw's training, her apprentice was named Heathertail. Later on, Silverfeather had an argument with her mate because she kept hanging out with her bff Midnightflame. In the end Leafstep scratched her eye and she decided she will brake up with him. Later own Midnight and Silver became mates, Leafstep was jealous and really mad because of this. Some time later the deputy died and Silver became the new one, she was also expecting their kits so Midnight took over her place as deputy just until their kits were apprentices. But one day, Leafstep killed Midnight.....and Silver was devastated....she told her leader imediately but Robinstar didn't believe her. Shortly after the tragedy, she had her kits Mistykit and Nightkit. One day, she decided to get rid of Leafstep so she fought him and in the fight Leafstep fell in front of the thunderpath and got killed by a monster.

It's a very interesting backstory! Maybe some detail about how she befriended them, or why Midnightflame and Silverfeather became mates? 16/20

78/100

Overall, Silverfeather is a great OC! Her backstory is very interesting, and she's a good cat! However, she needs more negative traits in her personality. Of course, these are just one person's opinions, so they don't really matter.