Warriors OC Rater

🌼Lilythorn🌼

Name: Lilythorn

Gender: Female ^^

Sexuality: Omnisexual/omniromantic

Past and future names: Lilykit, Lilypaw

Name meaning: "Lily" was given due to her (mostly) white pelt, "thorn" refers more to her prickly personality. 

Okay, cool. 5/5

Age (in moons): 76 moons

Clan: SparrowClan (they live in a forest with little to no ground cover but with many trees)

Past and future Clans: SparrowClan -> The Resistance -> SparrowClan

Rank: SparrowClan warrior

Past and future ranks: Kit -> Apprentice -> Warrior -> SparrowClan Deputy -> Resistance Fighter -> Warrior

Appearance: Primarily white with dull ginger ears and tail and striking amber eyes. She has a scar on her left shoulder and on her right hind paw. Her fur is silky, and she keeps it tidy and smooth. She has a pink nose and is average sized. 

Good, nothing wrong with this, maybe just a tiny bit more detail. She has realistic appearances. 19/20

Scent: She holds the generic smell of a SparrowClan cat, a very earthy and foresty scent. Underneath it there's hints of her favorite flower, roses. 

Okay, 5/5

Personality: Lilythorn is an antagonist in her story. She was raised to believe extremely strongly in putting her Clan above all else, but over the moons she twisted it into the Clan needed her, and thus she should thrive. She became selfish and a bit narcissistic, and tried not to question Olivestar's choices to exile the innocent cats who merely disagreed with her. She was overly prideful, and Olivestar fed into that by making her deputy in turn for being her loyal slave. But after she saw the damage done to her Clan, Lilythorn remembered the truth in what she'd been taught as a kit and apprentice. Her values and motives took a full 180°, and she betrayed Olivestar, leaving the Clan to help those who were exiled and eventually killing the horrid leader herself. Since then, she's become slightly less selfish and more humbled, but is still the same cat... just with better morals and experience.She still likes to complain and insists she be treated like royalty, but she's realized how much her Clan and her Clanmates mean to her, and, in the end, will always put her Clan first. 

Awesome! She definitely has very realistic traits, and I think her personality contains some of her backstory too. I love her personality, it's very unique and interesting. 20/20

(If I consider that as backstory too)

Cool, it's a very interesting life. I need more detail though, even though I completely understand because, well, this is a personality.........! 6/10

Likes: Roses, being treated like royalty, perfect weather, compliments, cleanliness, a full stomach, spring. 

Okay, 5/5

Dislikes: Extreme heat or cold, winter, hunger, discomfort, being wrong, seeing her Clan suffer, suffering herself, lavender. 

Cool, 5/5

Family:Sunrose - (father) Charismatic ginger-and-white tom with green eyes. He has high expectations and is a good fighter. He died when Lilythorn was an older kit. 

Swancloud - (mother) Dainty, beautiful, petty white she-cat with a grey tail-tip with amber eyes. She's spoiled and mean, and neglected all her kits. 

Otterkit - (brother) Small dull ginger tom. He died shortly after birth. 

Violetkit - (sister) Grey-and-white she-kit. Stillborn. 

Reedstep - (brother) Dark ginger tabby tom with white paws. Fair, kind, selfless, serious, paranoid. Despite not sharing Lilythorn's personality traits in the slightest, he has always been very close with her. They bonded through the anguish they felt with Sunrose died and the longing they felt for Swancloud to show them any love. 

Cottontuft - (mate) Fluffy dark brown she-cat with bright blue eyes. She's extremely kind and generous and sees the good in everyone. She was Reedstep and Lilythorn's best friend growing up. For a short time both of them liked her, but Reedstep never told Lilythorn as he didn't want to make her any sadder than she already was. Lilythorn confessed to Cottontuft a couple moons after Olivestar was dead.

 Dawnlight- (brother's mate) Pale grey she-cat with light green eyes. She's very daring and competitive, along with optimistic. She gets a bit reckless, though. She was a rogue before entering the Clan, and she and Reedstep gradually grew closer and closer. Reedstep fell in love with her, and she fell in love with him.

Rainkit - (niece) Dark grey tabby she-kit with amber eyes. Very energetic. 

Eaglekit - Dark ginger tom-kit with yellow eyes. He's fairly docile and calm. 

Sunkit - Pale ginger she-kit with light green eyes. Super optimistic.

Wow, her family is pretty big. 5/5

I can't find friends, enemies, and rivals, if I count the personality as a combination of the personality and backstory. I dunno what to do with the overall points, so I guess I'll just leave that out. 

70/75

Overall, Lilythorn is an awesome cat! She has a great personality, as well as a well-written and interesting life! She needs more explanations about her backstory, which literally doesn't make any sense because I don't know a lot about her backstory. However, these are just one person's opinions so they don't matter.