My views as reviews!

~ 𝐊𝐚𝐯𝐚𝐧𝐚𝐮𝐠𝐡 by @Raine_lavigne ~

Book Title : Kavanaugh 

Author: raine_lavigne

Reviewer: _wordmist_addict_ (that's me ^_^ )

1. Title :

The title was something which caught my eyes first, as I personally related it to Toby of pretty little liars. But even though that won't be the case for many readers, the title is still alluring. It is not a very common name and the word itself has it's own aura of being something intense, something which is like a silent storm or something. That's about the vibes the title gives, and now coming on to its relevance with the story. It is very relevant as it is the male lead's last name but since the story hasn't progressed much with only one proper chapter, I would say that the title's relevance is still yet to be decided in accordance to the upcoming plot line.

2. Cover:

The cover isn't very 'lights and shows'  - it is a very simple one. But being simple is it's biggest strength. The readers won't be first attracted to the cover, the title or the blurb would probably catch the reader's interest, but if they closely see the cover they will definitely admire it. The color palette and fonts is remarkable. The silhouette usage is perfect and worth noticing. Good work done ! 

*I recently saw that you changed the cover to something else. The new cover has a good color pallet but unfortunately it doesn't suit the story even a bit. The readers might get demotivated if they see the current cover as it does not give away that vibe of being intense and addictive kind of story. The cover is good but it just doesn't suit your book. I highly recommend you to change it back to the what it was before. 

3. Blurb: 

The blurb is something I think is the best about the book, I fell in love with it! The words used are heavy yet beautiful but try to replace one of two words with simpler words to ensure better comprehension of the blurb. At one of two places, it felt like it was over did - for e.g. usage of words like eloquent and indecorous. But the overall feel and look was good. Yet, one thing missing was the excerpt from the book. I really liked the first chapter so I am sure that upcoming chapters would also be good, so try to incorporate one scene in the blurb which will definitely catch the reader's attention. 

4. Aesthetics/ banners/ covers/playlists used in the chapters: 

The aesthetics used are quite good and appeals the reader. Good choice! This definitely hooks the reader to read more. You can include some banners of the main leads names instead of just writing it in bold, as that would really be hard to miss making sure readers know whose point of view they are reading.

5. First impression ( made from the first few paragraphs, blurb, cover and title)

The first impression is definitely positive and the cover along with the title helps to make sure that readers give the story a chance. The cliché part of the story may put off some readers as the story is quite the tagline of wattpad genre romance but still readers like me would not leave before checking out the first chapter.

The first paragraph of the first 'official' chapter that is the prologue, is straightforward and to the point. It's now an overused way of starting chapter but that doesn't stop the readers from getting intrigued. So smart choice!

6. First chapter (I am considering the prologue as the first chapter here)

The first chapter starts with the usage of imaginary as the protagonist explains the situation in front of her eyes and this makes it easier for the readers to get on with the story. The initial paragraphs give a good background of the protagonist's personality, preferences and relationship with people around her. So I can easily say that reader's do not feel like the character is hollow or identity less. They tend to create actual images of the character in their minds from the information they being fed with. 

Missing things include - lack of proper description of the protagonist's looks. It is there in the aesthetic part but most people who are there for a quick read tend to skip it. So it's better to include the physical appearance of the characters, both protagonist and supporting characters, in the first introduction chapter.

The ending line of the paragraph has to be stronger, you can't keep it vague. The current one is not that effective as it doesn't hook the readers enough to flip to the next chapter. 

7. Characters development

The characters are still getting introduced so it's hard to say anything about character development in the start of the story. But ensure that you take along the character development of the supporting characters with the main ones. Don't forget them, readers love them and it makes the story sound much more real.

8. Plotline

The plotline is yet to be developed but the early revelation about the family relations is quite unexpected so I am hoping that you have a good plot line written already. It's impossible to write a good plot without actually thinking about it beforehand. So keep that in mind when you are stating some facts which are linked to the plotline of the upcoming story. 

9. Grammar

The grammar usage is spotless. It looks well proofed and edited before editing so hats off for that. The usage of diverse vocabulary is evident and shows the caliber of the author vividly.  

10. Word count of chapters/ number of chapters

The approximate reading time of the first chapter is around ten minutes as said by the wattpad, so it would be around 2K words or something so I think it is fair enough. Continue to keep the word count between 2k- 3k and you will be good.

11. Writing style and flow of the book

The writing style is majorly focused on descriptive paragraphs and scenes which provide a good visual appeal to the readers. But at a few places it seems you lagged behind in describing the emotions properly. The most highlighted instance was the time when in the first chapter, protagonist was told about the shocking fact about her family. There wasn't much of the emotional turmoil or shock shown which puts off the readers as they start doubting the author's caliber and we don't want that, do we? So work on this.

12. Interaction and socialization with readers

There is a little interaction which can be increased a little to ensure that readers feel valued. Also try to socialize by asking questions or talk about something relatable to the readers. This will hook the daily readers further as they wait for your updates. 

13. Hook/ overall enjoyment

The hook is missing. I think the main reason for this is the first meeting of the protagonists. It is good to make sure that readers anticipate the romantic moments and first meetings in a romance genre book, but don't play with that anticipation for long. It is good till now, but make sure to introduce both the characters to each other by the 2nd or 3rd chapter. 

The overall enjoyment is certainly there as the characters are relatable and have layers which provide depth to them. So kudos for that!

14. Constructive criticism

I can feel the cliché story radiating so try to incorporate things and moments unique to your story. The predicable story is a disadvantage for you but that could be overcome with  creativity. So set your imagination wild and creativity on.

15. Suggestions

Work on introducing your own unique twists and moments to make sure readers distinguish your story from thousand others. Think about what I said about the cover but of course, the decision is yours! Also keep in mind to ensure you don't over do the usage of heavy words. Try being more descriptive with the appearance of the character in the chapters. 

Rating : 07/10

We have an intense and addictive story brewing here so good luck author!