Book Title : Her secret Mission
Author: thriller_mystery_
Reviewer: _wordmist_addict_
1. Title
The title is quite common you can try personalizing it according to your story. Same titles tend to confuse the readers and also prevents distinction of your book from the thousand others. Come up with something else. It catches the eye but still, a more relevant title would be better.
2. Cover
The cover is definitely relevant and intriguing. The color pallet used is quite dark, but it suits the story's theme. The image used in the background is apt and the layering done with photos and texts is worth noticing. Good job for that!
3. Blurb
The blurb is good. It is definitely appealing and good grammar is used. It gives a good amount of information about the book and still manages to ensure that readers click on the 'start reading' button. Good job! Also, you need to modify Justin's description. It is not able to compete wit the description of Agent R 07 which is perfect. But more than that, the blurb still manages to stand out.
4. Aesthetics/ banners/ covers/playlists used in the chapters
Aesthetics and banners are not used so the visual appeal is missing, try to incorporate it for better attraction. Playlists aren't necessary so it's fine.
5. First impression ( made from the first few paragraphs, blurb, cover and title)
The first impression is certainly positive. The cover gives away the suspense and thrill of the story but leaves much for the readers to imagine which is good. The blurb and cover together will be the one attracting many readers. The first few paragraphs are starting from between a scene going on which is a good choice. But as much as the readers will like the opening, they will get demotivated after seeing the double exclamation marks and short forms of words like 'you.' You need to change that. Don't change the content, it is great, but edit it and work on the presentation of the content.
Don't use capital letters! It's unprofessional. Use bold or italics to stress on something.
6. First chapter
The first chapter starts with flashback as everything that happened with the protagonist is playing. It is a very smart choice to open with the past, it really hooks the readers. But as much as I loved the content, the way of writing is not good. It needs serious editing. I could feel the plot already making me wonder what's happening next but the writing style kind of slowed that. You should take your time and edit out the chapters. You gave a lot of information about the protagonist and her background which is commendable as the readers get to know her and her background. This ensures the character look real and readers relate to it. So good job on that. The dialogues are also good but you need to work on writing them, or simply presenting them.
Also you need to focus on explaining the scene which is going on. You cannot hurry every scene down, take your time. This way you will be able to ensure that readers visualize your writing.
7. Characters development
The character development is not evident as the book is still not complete. Yet differences between the protagonist's personality can be seen from the flashbacks as she has matured and learnt to take care of herself. The transformation from a shy, fearful and quiet girl she has turned into a badass girl with self confidence and strong character. Other characters' development is yet to be seen and that is why I advise you to keep the development of supporting characters also in mind.
8. Plotline
The plotline is without a doubt enthralling. The story has been well thought of and is quite unique. The protagonist's personality and the past have a connection and that has been beautifully portrayed with the intriguing plot line.
9. Grammar
The grammar used needs a lot of editing. The vocabulary used is good and fair enough but still the use of correct punctuation is missing. Keep in mind the usage of capital letter is not at all professional. Also don't use too much of exclamation marks and full stops - it puts off the readers.
10. Word count of chapters/ number of chapters
The word count is perfect, it isn't dragged nor is it short. It ends at the right place. So good job on that! Keep the word count between 2k to 3k which sometimes is exceeding in some of your chapters. Rest all is great!
11. Writing style and flow of the book
Writing style and flow of the chapters is something which you need to really work upon. It is your weakness so you need to strengthen it . Good plot line might hook many readers yet good writing style and correct flow of chapters is equally important.
To ensure the flow of the chapters, avoid using numbers instead write number names. For e.g. instead of '2' write 'two' - it is more effective. Also when two different people are speaking, segregate their respective dialogues into two different paragraphs, it would ensure better representation and understanding of the readers.
The writing style definitely improves by the time we reach the seventh chapter so I think you have the potential but you just require experience. I am sure you will be able to improve and write much much better with the chapters that you publish. Good luck writing~!
12. Interaction and socialization with readers
The best thing is the way you value every reader of yours, you reply to them and never make them feel unwanted - so great work! Excellent interaction is seen with the readers and you could further enhance it with interactive author's note in the end to ensure socialization. It will really help.
13. Hook/ overall enjoyment
The hook is very much there as the reader anticipate the future plot and try to connect the dots between the present and past of the protagonist. The interactions with the group members of the agency is definitely enjoyable. The book is a very good choice for quick reads.
14. Constructive criticism
The gripping storyline lacks the presentation skills which could make it a good book. You have the content but you need to focus on its narration. Use correct punctuation.
15. Suggestions
You need to focus on presentation and grammar skills firstly, it is the most important thing you need to do before anything else.
*Queries answered :
~Should I add it used mature?, and some special advise just for me--> No, mature content isn't there, at least till now. So no need to add it. Special advise? Well, I highly recommend you to work on your presentation, as I said earlier. You have a very good imagination and plot idea but writing it on paper/screen is very necessary. So to cope up, you can edit your work after writing the draft and proof read it once or twice before publishing. And take TIME! Don't rush!
Rating : 5/10 (90% for the plot only ;) that's how good it is!)
With proper writing skills, this can be the next published book from wattpad!
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