Book Title : The Assassin's Prophecy
Author: Spread_Positivity_
Reviewer: _wordmist_addict_
1. Title
The title is very very intriguing, at least for romance and mystery lovers like me. I found it very interesting and from the moment I saw it, I really started wondering 'what is the prophesy?' , 'Why is it the Assassin's prophecy?' and many more questions. I think this will attract many readers because the title is quite unique and not so common. Good job done!
2. Cover
The cover gives away the presence of strong female lead which is good since many readers who are looking for such stories would get to know the theme of your story. The color pallet used is very relevant and beautiful. I really like the gradience of colors which appear in the background. But please add the name of the author in the cover also, it will help in easy recognition of both you as an author, and the book also.
3. Blurb
The blurb is quite short but not incomplete, so it gives the perfect amount of information about the story. It is straightforward and with accurate uses of grammar.
Try to highlight the werewolf aspect of the book more in the blurb.
4. Aesthetics/ banners/ covers/playlists used in the chapters
You can try incorporating these things to ensure that the visual appeal of your book is there. It will make it easy for the readers to relate to the appearance of the characters.
5. First impression ( made from the first few paragraphs, blurb, cover and title)
The first impression is very positive, as readers are really motivated to read the story. The cover, title and blurb altogether attract the readers to read this book by all means. The opening paragraph is so damn good and perfect that I don't have words. I think it's one of the best openings I have seen in any book, wattpad or out. So very nicely done!
6. First chapter
The first chapter is just so good! I was so engrossed in reading what is happening that I was forgetting about commenting in the inline comments section. It was that good. Your way of writing works like a masterpiece in getting the reader's attention on the story. It doesn't let the readers deviate from reading - so it's commendable!
One thing - please don't change the point of view without prior notice to the readers, like you did in chapter one. Either keep it in third person or keep it in first person. Mixing it, confuses the readers - though this won't be a sufficient reason for them to leave your book hehehe. That's how much effective your writing is!
The ending of the first chapter was perfect too, as it hooked the readers enough to flip to the next chapters!
Good job done here author!
7. Characters development
The character development of the protagonist is very very vivid. We can see that her mother's disappearance changed her a lot. Her lifestyle, personality, works, preferences etc. everything has changed. Grief and impatience to find her mother, has engulfed her life and made her like she is. This aspect is clearly explained and described. The emotional turmoil are clearly imagined and narrated, so very well done.
8. Plotline
The is great as of now, as it consists of all the right elements of the story in correct proportion. The plot is still developing and is going in the right direction. Plot line is intriguing and doesn't give the readers even a single reason to leave your book without reading till the last chapter. Good job done!
The fantasy aspect of the storyline about the protagonist's real identity is still developing, so good luck for that!
9. Grammar
Grammar is spotless without any errors which is commendable and meritorious. But you need to use correct spelling even when you are trying to focus on one word. For e.g. use 'No' instead of 'Nooo'. Use italics to stress on some words. Similarly for stressing on sentences, don't use capital letters. It is really very unprofessional. Use italics or bold letter if necessary.
The vocabulary used is perfect and definitely enriched with laudable words which showcase your vast vocabulary.
10. Word count of chapters/ number of chapters
The word count is fluctuating in the chapters. Sometimes it is about 5 minutes (according to wattpad) but sometimes it is 19 minutes. So try to keep it constant, not exact but close to each other. For instance, I would recommend you to keep it between 2k - 3k. which would take around 12 to 15 minutes to read and is the best word range of wattpad books.
11. Writing style and flow of the book
The writing is really smooth and buttery, to be accurate. The chapters move with flow and the writing style conveys the narration very nicely. Even though chapters are really good, I liked your third person perspective much more than the first person. You have a great eye for writing in third person so you can try experimenting with it in either this book only or in other future books you will write.
Work on editing the paragraphs by dividing some of the very long paragraphs into two smaller paragraphs. This will ensure readers don't skip the details or lose the line they were on.
12. Interaction and socialization with readers
Very good interaction is seen with the readers, but recently a little bit decline is evident which may be because of personal reasons like exams, studies, etc. but that is completely understandable. Try incorporating author's note and that too in bold letter towards the end or starting of the chapters. This will increase socialization in the initial chapter too. But either ways, great and more than sufficient interaction and socialization is evident.
13. Hook/ overall enjoyment
The hook is much there as the chapters start and end at the perfect note, making the readers anticipate for the next chapter. The perfect amount of suspense about the mystery of the protagonist's mother is further increasing the hook and making the readers interested in the story. Overall enjoyment is great as readers get a mixed bag of possible romance, thrill, suspense, mystery and humor in this story. So good work done. Highly appreciated and certainly praise-worthy!
14. Constructive criticism
The fantasy vibes are missing until the later chapter, it seemed like a normal human life. Maybe because the protagonist is a human, but you have to set the mood with some supernatural elements in the initial two three chapters instead of the fifth or sixth chapter. You can't just surprise the readers with eyes changing colors, so work on this.
15. Suggestions
If you are putting author's note in the middle of the chapter saying things like - this is pronounced like this and all - then keep it in bold letter. This is to differentiate between the author's notes and the story. This will help the readers.
So instead of --> 'this is pronounced as this'
You should write --> 'A/N - this is pronounced as this'
*Queries answered :
~is this book enjoyable for readers? --> Definitely it is! It is really enjoyable and beautifully written, seriously.
Rating : 8.5/10
One of the Best books I have ever read and is definitely deserving to be be published!
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