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Name: Nix Wolguard

Was named after his mom's favorite champagne, Nyxburge Purple' La Frou'

There is such a thing as La Frou, but I really like how you kind of made up your own. Adds to the fandom! Nice name though!

Nicknames: Maid Boy, which came from a prank his sister pulled by swapping all of his wardrobe with one single Maid Outfit for the day, originally being a week, but he agreed to wear the cat ears if he got his clothes back by tomorrow.

Okay?

Gender: Male

Sexuality: Pansexual, He actually has a girlfriend who acts as his reins.

Reins? As in she controls him??

Age: 12 turning 13, they are this age because they have lived to that age so far, they shall probably live to the age 97, idk, probably going to do some dumb stuff and die though.

So, he's just going to Hogwarts?

Family: 

Mother: Faia Wolguard, d i e d of brain tumor.

Weird you didn't spell it out but okay. Would have liked a more detailed description of them.

Father: Biological Father, l e f t, idk why.

Step Father: Haddock Socarces, forced out due to slowly inheriting drinking habits and mood swings after his mother died.

Why is he their step-father? Is he the brother of them, who then became their step-father??

Sister: Laura Wolguard, alive, current caretaker of Nix, Beast Caretaker Assistant of Hogwarts.

How old is she?

Cousin: Annika Wolguard (I forgot their name I should probably tag their owner) Nix's Russian Cousin.

Why is she important?

Appearance: 5'3 Pale White Skinned Male, with short messy/curly hair that just caps his eyebrows. His eyes are a clear black, nothing special. He wears the required Hogwarts uniform, along with a simple black shirt and black tank top underneath, he also wears black jeans with black loafers to match.

Personally, I would add more to the description. I like that you added his height, but still. Clear black eyes? Unless he's not human, that's nigh impossible. I forgot this was Hogwarts Fandom lol.

Personality: Very brash and head on, often getting into drama and bad Situations, which leads to him getting hurt or getting someone else hurt. He gains a sweet side and admiration for those he loves, but a bitter hatred for those on his bad side, even if they aren't huge jerks. He rejected his semi-violent nature after getting over the death of his friend and understudy Asriel, adopting a more calm and non-lethality personality, which increased after he adopted his cat, Azalea.

Why don't we know more about Asriel? If his whole personality completely changed, then shouldn't they be more important? How would people get on his bad side? Does he have any enemies? What about his friends? How did Asriel help him? How did Asriel die?

Abilities: Strong resistance to alcohol poisoning and hangovers, it being passed down from his family. He also has the average wizard spells, topped with fair and adequate dagger ability.

He's... He's a kid. Why would he be drinking?! Where would he even get the goods? So, his father's death didn't affect him academically?

Backstory: Born in a mansion in England, he lived only with his mother and his sister due to his father f a k i n g l e a v i n g. His mother quickly got Nix and Laura a father figure in the form of Haddock Socarces, who was a pretty good person. By the time Laura had graduated Hogwarts, their mother had gotten a brain tumor that she did not recover from. After that, Haddock resorted to alcoholism to get over the pain, resulting in the pain reflecting onto Nix and Laura, even though he was soon kicked out, it still had a longing effect on the both of them, resulting in Nix's violet behavior.

Faking leaving? Mansion? So, he's very rich? Ah, that explains where Haddock came from. But how did his mother know Haddock? So, he was kicked out because Laura became old enough to be Nix's legal guardian?

Residence: Wolguard Mansion, due it technically being owned by the Wolguards.

So his family is very rich?

Personal Items: Dagger, Wand, Rubber Bullet Gun.

Is he a Muggle then? Or Half-Blood? Why would he have a toy gun? What is his wand like?

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FINAL VERDICT:

I would give Amaruq, Fluffy, & Fang a 7.5/10. I know, my ratings have been rather brutal, but if you submit an OC, it's probably one you use fairly often, and most of these bios are hardly long enough for the worth of a main OC. Most people just roleplay this and roleplay that, without really thinking about their character. And I get it, you want to roleplay, have fun, not spend time writing a bio that you already know. But others don't. Give them a look into your head, into your characters head. One thing you can you do is put yourself in their shoes. What would you do if you were them? I liked the character overall, but there were a lot of loose ends that should be tied up. Mainly the family and friend aspect. Also, a look into what they like/hobbies or dislike. The backstory and personality could use some tweaking and more development, and there are a few unanswered question, but it's a good throwback OC. I really like all the names though.

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