LUNA'S REVIEWS

Drugs, Treasons and Other Demons

Title: Drugs, Treasons and Other Demons
Author: @HappyCoati
Genre: Dark Romance

Before I start my review, I just want to say WOW. I am a huge fan of dark romance already, but this book takes the cake. IT'S SO GOOD. As soon as I'm finished with this review I'm probably going to read the rest, and I would recommend it to literally everyone.

Grammar/Punctuation: It's written very well. Any problems I saw with grammar or punctuation were just little errors here and there that a quick edit would fix. I would recommend using an online tool like google docs, or reedsy, just to help proofread a bit. When I say little errors here and there I just mean missing commas, a misspelling here and there, literally nothing crazy. The only reason I even really noticed them is because I wanted to take in every single detail to review your work.

I know one of your main concerns was rambling too much and boring the reader, but I don't think there was any of that here, really. It can sometime seem that way, especially when you're including so many details and thoughts, but even after reading through multiple time I came to the conclusion that all the information you included was either needed, or it was there to create imagery. I didn't notice any repetition, which is usually what causes it to be boring or drawn out. There was not a single second that I was bored. The details gave me goosebumps, I loved them so much.

For example, in chapter 4, Ransoms and Mayhem, you wrote, "For when my face rots off from my skull, maybe it'll stop twitching every time I get lost in my thoughts."

Just wow. It's one of my favorite quotes so far. It's relatable and so eloquently written in my opinion.

Title/Summary: I am in LOVE with the title. It has a nice, catchy ring to it and draws the reader in. And after reading the first five chapters it's perfectly fitting. The summary is great as well! Short, sweet, to the point without giving too much information away to the reader. If I were being picky, I would suggest adding a couple quotes, or a small excerpt leading to the climax to really pull the reader in. This is something I like to do with my own work, and something I'm very attracted to when looking for a novel to read, as it really catches my attention.

Plot/Character Development: Amazing job with your character development! Going back to the details and information I mentioned previously, all those descriptions really helped create Sarah Kennedy's character, and I am in love with her. I love that she's so far from perfect, but so smart. She's one of the best characters I've read about in a long time, if I'm being honest with you. The fact that June and Kaitlyn bully her also really helps show who she is. She has no problem with telling them to go fuck themselves, but refrains out of her love for Ana, who just wants them all to get along. I personally feel like it only reinforces the idea that she's strong, and she definitely is!

That being said, I hate June, Kait, and Ana. They're obviously bad friends. I almost hate Ana the most because she's the reason Sarah feels the need to put up with the blatant disrespect. I don't feel bad at all for them and I hope karma gets their ass, they piss me off so much. That's the point, though, I know.

As for the plot, I know that was one of your main concerns, but I couldn't find any holes. All of your bases are covered because of the descriptions and information you provide, and I couldn't find any discrepancies within the first five chapters. I also don't think it's complicated in the slightest, and maybe that's something that changes later in the book, but I really do think the beginning is fine. I am curious to know what the climax will look like later on, as I have no idea, but that's the kind of curiosity you want your readers to have. Make them ask the questions and let your writing provide the answers throughout.

I could see it being a problem if you add any new information/characters way later in the novel for the sake of a plot twist, but I'm really not concerned. I'll let you know what I think as I continue reading, LOL.

As long as you keep your characters consistent, I feel like the rest will easily follow. That's something I've personally struggled with (and still do, to be honest) and I find that keeping my characters consistent and having a solid backstory to refer to helps a lot. If it's something you're really worried about, I would suggest outlining everything to help keep you organized.

OVERALL: I am in love with this novel so far. You have a solid story, with solid characters, and I can't wait to see where Sarah ends up! I know I didn't really give a whole lot of criticism, so I apologize, but I truly could not find any major flaws. Honestly, I personally feel I am way too under-qualified to be giving you a review anyway. Still, I hope this helps! Please feel free to reach out with any more questions, concerns, or comments!