Critic: WynterFrost
Quick Summary: After an accident, Snowpaw finds herself in the ThunderClan camp where she discovers she is the reincarnation of Spottedleaf.
Liked/Disliked: Honestly this is not a good book. There is barely any description used, the point of views changed multiple times during a chapter. Sometimes only for a couple of sentences before changing again. This made the story line hard to follow because the view kept changing so much. I had to read the book again to understand what was happening properly. Also something that confused me was how Snowpaw ended up at ThunderClan when she fell on her own territory. Was she near the ThunderClan border? Were ThunderClan trespassing? These things need to be explained so the reader isn't left confused. Also Firestar declaring his love for Snowpaw a day after she comes to camp is a bit ridiculous and a little creepy. Where's Sandstorm? Is she even part of this version of ThunderClan?
Author Improvement: More description is the number one thing needed to improve this book. This will really help the reader understand what is happening better. What is Snowpaw's territory like? What can she scent, see and hear as she's hunting? How does she feel when she discovers she's in ThunderClan? When she finds out she's the reincarnation of Spottedleaf?
Final Thoughts: Serious editing, revising and dedication is needed for this story to live up to the potential that I know it can reach.
Rating: 1/5
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