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I think the title is very enticing and it does give off a mysterious vibe.
Book Cover 3 / 5
The graphic used for the story fits well. The font is somewhat unclear making it hard to read the cover, and the little blurb at the bottom is in such a small font that it is somewhat impossible to read.
Blurb 4 / 5
The blurb is a nice length and tells the plot of the story in a way that doesn't reveal too much of what will happen, but dives into enough mystery that the reader will wonder what is going on with the girl who had died a long time ago. I will just point out that the very first line, which is a quote, does not have any proper punctuation.
Plot and Storytelling 12 /15
The plot is interesting and it does a good job of creating mystery and making the reader wonder what is happening. Some of the sentence structure is inaccurate and some sentences are quite long, which stops the flow of reading a little bit while trying to make sense of what is being presented in the story.
Character Development 8/10
The characters are portrayed realistically, and their actions and emotions make sense. In terms of development it seems like for the most part the characters' personalities stay the same as the story progresses but they are still represented in a very believable way.
Writing Style 7/10
The writing style is easy to follow and the flow makes sense. There are some parts that do feel a bit overly explained, and some paragraphs are a bit long which makes it harder to interact with certain parts. With that being said, the writing overall is very good.
Grammar 9/10
There are just a few instances in dialogue tags where commas and periods are a bit mixed up and should be switched with the other.
Originality and Creativity 10/10
The story plot is very original and creative. I really enjoyed reading something that felt fresh and also somewhat dystopian and creepy (in terms of the dead girl). Very nice job in creating your story.
Emotional Impact 10/10
I think this story has a very emotional impact and you portrayed fear and sadness very well through actions and also how you displayed your characters internal emotions.
Pacing & Structure 3 / 5
There were some parts where the story seemed to move slowly, such as when some paragraphs were a bit longer and a lot of description was being used that could be omitted without disrupting the plot of the story. Overall it was a nice pace and the chapters themselves weren't too long.
