The Italian Devil
Chapter Two
Ophelia Kokinos POV
Is... her last name Kokinos? Or... did you forget an apostrophe here? -1
It's not everyday my father summons me to speak with him. I guess you could we are very distance, there's no 'he used to be the kindest father in the world but something happened that made him cold-hearted.' None of that ever happened. It's always been like that for the past twenty-seven years.
Her father hasn't been introduced yet and she just gave us a run-down here. Not to mention, she said for the past twenty-seven years, and she is that age. So does that mean that her birth made him stoic and cruel? -1
"You have to marry Marco Donati."
>/sigh.< -1
...He states, staring at me with cold green-eyes.
The second time you've called him cold. Really? I don't know what's more irritating, the fact that you used cold again, or the fact that you put a hyphen between 'green' and 'eyes'. -1
"The Donati family are one of the most powerful families in the world. Having this marriage will tie our families together. The Kokinos family will live on." ... Ah, of course. The same old 'tie our families together.'
A sin for each time the word family is mentioned. -5
Cast Sins
Blake Lively as Ophelia Kokinos Because only the most beautiful blonde-haired woman can be the protagonist! -1
Brittany Snow as Camilla Romano And I bet this will be the jealous girl, just because she's beautiful, has blonde hair and blue eyes, and her name is Camilla. Romano. Romano as in Italian cheese. -1
Naya Rivera as Rita Marion The sexy best friend? No, don't pull beautiful Naya into this bullsh*t. She's too busy with modeling. -1
"Because, Ophelia, you and Marco need to get to know each other better."
>/sigh.< -1
Ophelia Kokinos, The Greek Heiress.
And I bet she's American? I don't know, that face looks pretty American to me. Or maybe you just wanted the most beautiful person you could find on the list of celebrities. -1
Total Chapter Sins: 14
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