The Italian Devil
Chapter Three
"He's a devil in a suit."
No, I'm pretty sure a devil as red eyes, coal skin, horns? Unless you're trying to hint at the whole "he's possessed" then okay. -1
After the talk with my father and how he dropped the biggest bomb on me,...
The biggest bomb was the atomic one in WWII that was dropped on Nagasaki, Japan. So... are you really so rich you're ignorant about history or do you just not give a f*ck? -1
I couldn't help but feel slightly offended that he sold me to the Donati family even before I was born just to untie our families.
Woah, okay, he never said that at all. One, he didn't "sell" you, and two, never mentioned that you were "sold" before you were born. Unless the author left out a chunk of their previous conversation, or maybe I didn't pay attention. -1
Arrogant, rude and always described as a 'Greek Italian God.' Which made no sense whatsoever.
And you being a Greek American Heiress does? -1
" kolokýthi."
You can obviously tell that Google Translate was used for this, because of the space between the " and the k. Even then, this is not a real word at all. Kolokýthi = kolokýthi in English. Two sins for that. -2
"This is the most ridiculous thing I have ever heard of!"
Oh, you mean forced marriage? Yeah, it happens a lot. Maybe if you got your head out of your rich ass you would know that. -1
He cups my cheek gingerly.
My hand slaps his hand away.
Alright... you just had a rant on how you loved him, how his face was oh-so-beautiful, and here you are physically harming him? -1
I frown. "Isn't that blackmailing?"
Finn chuckles and plants a small kiss to my cheek. "Call it whatever you want."
How about illegal? -1
Total Chapter Sins: 10
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