review #10: A Bit Of Love Hate(Harry Styles)

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by laly13

by laly13

author: curlyhazza

rating: PG-13

read it if: you like love\hate stories

plot:

Chelsea: down to earth, independent, starbucks barista, dislikes one direction due to best guy friend, Adrian's obsession.

Harry: charming, cheeky, flirt, cute, hot, confident, in world's biggest boy band, not used to being rejected by women.

Chelsea was just a normal girl working at starbucks until one night she bumps into Harry Styles from one direction. He likes what he sees but she doesn't even give him a second look. Harry tries everything to change her opinion about him and make her like him. Will it be enough to change her mind? Will they fall for each other? And if they do, will their love be strong enough to make it through everything? After all she's just an ordinary girl and he is the worlds most wanted boy

review:

If this story was a soap opera, "na na na" would be the theme song and people will get frustrated because this up and down story won't get steady.

This story is kind of predictable(because when they act nicely, they get in the "I can't stand you" phase quickly, and that happens everytime until the final chapters), cliché (is kind of those stories where the girl tames the guy, just that this time isn't a bad boy, is just Harry),and frustrating(because all the romance book suckers, like me ,or maybe all type of fanfic readers, wants them to stop the stupidiness[don't know if I wrote that right haha] and decide now). and this can't slip from my criticism, but the biggest fail of here was leave the story just when they finally are a couple just because they(the authors) got kind of bored of keep writing the story.

nice plot, good grammar, swingy development(hate, love, hate, love, hate) but the sequence of events was well made(didn't got stuck in one event),bad way to end the story(it was right in the middle)... if you have a imagination to keep the story going and\or the plot really calls you, go ahead and read it

note to author:

If you're reading this, thanks for making this story. This story saved me from a boring day in school and had me and my best friend talking about the story all day. But I'm going to complain about the ending again: if I have the facts correct, you finished it because you didn't had time to keep going you got bored with the story. It's normal to lost interest and don't have time for it, but when you publish it and people are spending their time reading it, finish leave it in the middle of it is a total fail. Couldn't you make at least 5 more chapters or ask for someone to continue it?

If you feel offended by this, sorry but this is my opinion. take care ;)

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