Help Me Out?

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So I have this Creative Writing project due and I was hoping you dudes could help out, I wanted to know if I posted it on here would you comment and correct my stupid mistakes I don't notice? Please, my Teacher says I'm amazingly creative I just need to see the stupidly small mistakes. Help me out?

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