Author: Maplefoot
Book: Thomas
Before I start with rating, I would like to say something first. This book you wrote on your own experience will be forever carved inside my brain. Sadness is pouring out of it and I couldn't stop my tears from falling. Words are not strong but lines are, and that sensible emotion was present while I was reading.
Okay let's get this started.
COVER
-Obviously yellow. It's a good color, I like it
- It is very beautiful, your brother was a really cute boy. I like how his hair was wild.
- No celebs.
- Font is a right match, also the color of it.
SUMMARY
- It is very interesting and creative. It makes a reader wonder what else happens in the book.
- It does say a lot and I really like it.
YOUR STYLE OF WRITING
- There are some grammar errors I've seen, like - Their instead of they're, your instead of you're and there instead of their. But that is easily fixable.
- Spaces between paragraphs are poor, you should really but some spaces between them. It's easier to a reader that way, and to you to recognize where the mistake is. It just looks more organized that way.
- Expression is pretty well. Everything is easily understood.
PLOT
Well this section would be for actual story with plot twists, so no plot here.
CHAPTERS
- Their lenght is different, but you know that already, for me who likes it short but much to be said is just fine.
- They give alot of informations, yes.
- They are interesting and hearbreaking to read..
BEGINNING
- It's not long, it's a good lenght.
- It's not boring, it's kind of tiring to read paragraphs without space.
- It's pretty amazing for a start, straight forward. Asking a question many people would ask first.
THE END
- It's good.
- Okay, my thoughts about.. I know I have been reading it through blurry eyes, all the way to the actual end. Such a young life leaving this world, it's almost like I felt it while reading. I'm not exaggerating, you maybe wrote it without any tears but me as a reader... well it went down at me like a hard ball of painful things.
- I did like it.
There you go, Caitlin :), thank you again..
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