Children's stories

The Closet Door Part 1: The Beginning

So this I wrote when I was ten. I found it and typed it up, and I haven't read anything so cringe-worthy in a long time. It is so bad. It is so so so bad. I can't even. I was also obsessed with Narnia at that point, so this is basically exactly like it.

The four Springs children were sitting on their new front porch when four year old Faith said, "Luke, let's explore and pick out our rooms."
"Okay," said Luke, "but let's be careful, you never know where a spider might be lurking!"
"Luke!" said Hope, "You know I hate spiders!"
"What's in that big closet I wonder?" said Caroline.
"Nothing, you goose," said Luke.
"Well, let's check anyway," said Caroline.
"Fine," Luke said.
They went inside, "It sure has grown warmer, I can't see anything," said Hope.
"That's because it's a closet," said Luke.
"No, I can't see anything at all, not even the door," said Luke.
"That's because a giant spider is blocking it," said Luke.
"Luke, stop!" said Hope. Then they saw something. It was like a light and as it passed them they realized it was a lamb. Behind it trees and grass and woodland animals and stars could be seen, but in front, everything was blank.
Then the lamb spoke, "Where have you come from?" it asked.
"From, from England," said Luke, "where are we?"
"In Walimpia, and I am Mesisus." Said the lamb, at that word everything started appearing. There were Elves, Dwarves, Treemen and Treewomen,and lots and lots of different kinds of animals, but only one man, and lots of spiders.
"Ugh," said Hope, "So many spiders."
The man beckoned over to Luke, Luke went over. "What's your name?" asked Luke.
"Bangel," the man replied.
"Well, Bangel, what do you want?"
"Pinch somebody."
"Why?"
"Because."
"Why should I believe you, and where do you come from?" asked Luke.
"With you."
"Nobody in England is named Bangel, I searched on Facebook."
"Oh, but I'm known by a different name in England, but you shouldn't know that name."
"Why?" asked Luke.
"Just do it."
"Fine, but nothing is going to happen," said Luke, then he went up to a squirrel and pinched it. Everybody turned to him.
Then the lamb spoke, "What have you done, Luke?"
"I, I pinched it."
"What?"
"The squirrel," said Luke.
"You have committed the first sin." Mesisus said. Everyone gasped.
"It was Bangel, he, he told me to."
"You didn't have to."
"No, I guess I didn't"
"Because of you there will be sin in Walimpia," said the lamb.
"I'm terribly sorry," said Luke.
"Do you want to undo your wrong?" asked the lamb.
"Yes," said Luke.
"Good, you must take a gem from that brook yonder, and take it for three days until you come to a clear blue lake with a bare Island in it. There you must put the gem. Then take the same way no shortcuts home," he said. Then he called to an elf, "This will be one of your companions and the others will be your kin, said the lamb.
The elf came closer and spoke, "I am Sprengle, I have no father but the lamb himself. I will aid you on your journey."

Aaaaahhhhhh, it is so bad, and that was only part one. Believe me, it gets worse.