Book by: hiii-its-just-me
Reviewed by: leila7924
Cover: 8/10
I really like the background of your cover. My only suggestion is that you make your username smaller and put at the bottom of the page. And then put your title in the top or center of the page.
Summary: 9/10
I like your summary. It seems really honest and open, but still left me wanting to know more. Great job!
Grammar: 7/10
First off, you should always put a comma before the word 'but' in a sentence.
Good EX: I liked him, but I couldn't date him.
Bad EX: I liked him but I couldn't date him.
Bad EX: I liked him but, I couldn't date him.
You also have run-on sentences throughout your story. You may want to read through and shorten those or make them into multiple sentences.
There are lots of instances where you should have a comma in a sentence.
None of these mistakes made your work unreadable. I only suggest reading through the story and fixing them to make certain parts a bit easier to understand.
Plot: 8/10
I really like your story so far. The plot is interesting and I wasn't ever bored when reading it. I'm interested to see how it will end and I hope everything works out for Thea and Michael. I was a bit confused about the timeline at the beginning. If that was a point where she hated Michael or liked him. Because the first chapter talks about how she doesn't hate him anymore, but then in the second chapter she is annoyed that she has to sit by him.
Characters: 9/10
Your characters seem very real. I can imagine them as people I could meet in real life. I like the way Thea interacts with her friends and with Michael. It seems very genuine.
First Paragraph: 9/10
Your first paragraph was a good way to introduced the plot of the story and the conflict Thea is facing when it comes to her feelings towards Michael. I enjoyed it and it definitely made me more intrigued to read your story.
Overall: 8/10
I really enjoyed the plot of your story and the characters. The only problem with it was some grammar stuff, but that should be easy for you to fix. Great job!
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