Fabulous Book Reviews

Book Review 8: Night Time

Reviewed by: leila7924

Story by: loveeboat

Cover: 9/10
Your cover is really pretty and drew me into your story. I thought the subtitle on it was really interesting and it definitely related to the story and the summary. Great job.

Summary: 9/10
Your summary is very intriguing and does well to bring the reader in. It goes over the basic topic of the story (that love can't solve everything) without giving away the actual plot of the story. I think the vagueness and shortness of your summary actually works in your favor here. 

Grammar: 8/10
Most of the time, people put thoughts in italics, not in single quotes. When it is in the quotations and not in a separate paragraph of its own, it can cause some confusion for the reader. The way I would recommend doing it is by putting it in italics.

Good Ex: That would be so cool, she thought.

Bad Ex: 'That would be so cool.' She thought.

Bad Ex: 'That would be so cool.' She thought.

There were also some basic grammar/spelling errors, such as forgetting an apostrophe or using the wrong form of their/there/they're. Those can be easily fixed by just proofreading the story or even getting someone else to read through it for you( a fresh set of eyes can bring to light many mistakes you may be missing).

Plot: 8/10
The plot of your story is super interesting. I loved that it didn't end how most romance stories end. Everyone is always searching for a happy ending with their Prince Charming and that isn't always realistic. I really enjoyed reading this. There were a couple times that it seemed a bit too vague in the way you described things. Like I could get a good idea of what was going on, but I wasn't 100% sure I was right. 

Characters: 9/10
I enjoyed the way you expressed the characters' emotions and how you explained why Florence felt so weak around Archer. She was in love and didn't want to lose the guy she loved so she went along with whatever he said even though it hurt her. I feel like that happens to a lot of girls in real life, and people take advantage of them. Part of me wishes that Florence would have been able to get over Archer, but another part of me understands the appeal and reality of not being able to move on. 

First Paragraph: 9/10
I really liked the epigraph you put at the beginning of the story. Once again, it just makes the reader more interested in what will happen in your story. And the first sentence of the actual first chapter also achieves that same intrigue. Great job!

Overall: 9/10
I really liked your story and the way you told it was very unique. I liked how you told stories about different parts of her childhood and how Archer influenced her. I liked how we didn't even know the main character's name until the end of the last chapter and didn't know Archer's name until the middle of the book. This story was super enjoyable. Great job!