The title sounds a little scandalous at first, but it's also short and sweet. I like it.
➢ Cover
I see you draw your own art, and I really like it. I think you should re-draw the cover and maybe change the Weird glowing outline to something sharper. The words are a bit blocky, and I can't read the words on the very bottom. Other than that, I like the idea of it. Just maybe freshen it up and I think it'd be perfect.
➢ Description
The first paragraph doesn't have an indent, and I don't like how you used 'But' as the beginning of the sentence in paragraph two. 'Fate' is also capitalized, but I personally wouldn't capitalize it. I may be wrong by grammar standards (I'm not one-hundred-percent sure), but I just personally wouldn't. It isn't a name or place, so I think it should just be 'fate'.
The description is interesting though, and I don't think it's half-bad. It could use some work for an actual book cover, but I think it's okay.
➢ Grammar
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I talked a lot about dialouge tags and detail under "Writing Style", so I won't make you read it twice. The other thing wrong with your spoken lines is that you use an apostrophe (') instead of quotation marks ("). Please switch to quotation marks (") so your story looks more like a novel.
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