Title: The Ice Princess
Written by: queenfatiniz_
Review↯
-First saya tengok story desc awak and i don't know la itu habit awak or what untuk meninggalkan dua titik noktah. Kalau ikut tanda in malay itu dah salah.
- Tolong gunakan bahasa standard or formal
Eg.
"Tak Senanye apa masalah Kau Haa?!"
*sebenarnya.....kau haa*
"Plisslah...."
*Please*
- Shortform dekat story desc dah ada i prefer awak taip in full words. Nowadays orang suka baca without any shortform. Sebab kadang-kadang kita fahan shortform tu tapi orang lain tak faham. And not nice sebab bacaan awak for public.
-Content part yang watak tu saya tak faham langsung why awak tinggalkan kosong. For what actually? Better awak kemas kini benda tu. Dah la first part dah not nice.
-First chapter about your double full stop and shortform. Tolong perbaiki.
-Huruf besar huruf kecil tolong jaga.
-Ada closure okay la.
My Opinion↯
-I think awak kena study more in writing. Terlalu banyak kesalahan. Kesalahan penggunaan istilah kata. Shortform terutamanya. Kita as author kena fikirkan about readers bukannya tulis story and syok sendiri.
-Maybe for you itu benda biasa as your kehidupan seharian but lain orang lain pandangan mereka. Jadi saya rasa awak kena ubah overall.
Rate↯
30/100
Keep your hard work
Thank you
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