Love Hurts by nehajj1234 is well written as far as grammar goes. The idea for the plot and the amount of detail that goes into the book is also excellent. This writer has a lot of potential! :)
However, it does drag at times, and some of the conversations sound a bit forced. Also, the chapter notes left by a author, are in theory a good idea. Don't get me wrong, it's great that you are so excitied about writing and talking to the readers! But, as far as chapter notes, I think it's a good idea to follow these rules.
1. Chapter notes should be pretty short, as a lengthy one will take a reader out of the moment, and while a occasinal long one is fine, having a long one every time will make readers not read them
2. If your goal is to have 2500 words a chapter, the chapter notes are not part of the word count
3. While you may feel obligated to tell your reader about every little thing, it's usually a good idea to keep it to the important stuff
4. Only put one in a chapter, preferably at the end! While it is very nice of you to thank readers for reading right away, do try to save it for the end! :)
5. You don't have to put them at every chapter, or any! Don't feel obligated to!
Okay, done reviewing now! Phew! Keep writing, and you will get even better!
Good luck!
KateKatie5672 :)
