Enigma by christdora123.
First, I would to point out that I usually find it's better to show the readers in the story what your characters look like, instead of providing pictures. I just believe that it gives the book a more professional and refined look. Grammar and punctuation need to be improved but definitely not terrible.
Now for the good things.
I think that you have a lot of creativity and it shows in your plot. I also like that the conversations between the characters seem to be realistic, which is an extremely good skill to have.
Keep writing! :)
