Title: Lupis
Comments:
"Nice cover!"
"The summary is quite intriguing. There are some grammatical errors present and I feel the last paragraph is unnecessary, as it gives away too much of your plot, you should leave more suspense."
"I've just read the first chapter. You could start off with some drama to get your readers engaged. I thought your descriptions were written well. Remember to go back and fix a couple of grammatical errors, like adding commas where needed."
"I liked your second chapter."
"Excellent word choice!"
"Be careful, switching between present and past tense."
"Wow, long chapters!"
Overall Summary:
•Your book was interesting and I liked reading your descriptions. You might want to start off with the plot in your first chapter though, to hook more readers. Overall, I thought your book was written nicely and I wish you the best of luck!
