Title: The Forgotten Sister \Jeggy/
Comments:
"I read the summary, some grammatical mistakes, but it seems like an interesting plot."
"It's interesting how you go right to the plot, but you might want a little build-up."
"You could provide more character descriptions when introducing new characters"
"Hmm... might want to go back and correct those grammar and spelling mistakes, remember to capitalize those 'I's"
"It would be nice if you made longer chapters"
Overall Review:
•This could be an interesting story, especially with the plot, but it needs more work and revision. I wish you the best of luck!
