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When Smiley was finally calmed, I wanted to do her a work for me.
Me: Smiley, I have called to tell you I need some help to find the culprit of Siya.
Smiley: Hey, I am a friend, no best friend of Siya. Even I want to throttle the neck of the person who killed Siya. I will help you in every thing you ask.
Me: Thank you so much but I have to tell you what I got to know about my investigation.
In this way I told everything that happened in past 2 to 3 weeks.
Me: I want you to sneak into Anna's office.
I heard a loud scream which made me to take my phone a bit far away from my ear.
Smiley: Noooooooo!!!!!!!! Are you nuts? If Sam comes to know, she will scold me. If your Anna comes to know, he will not think twice before throwing me to prison and if my hell lord, uncle comes to know then definitely he will not think once before sending me near my parents.
Me: Common yaar , me and Siya took risk to talk to you hell lord uncle to let you to cinema, shopping, tour and every thing, now I am asking a single help please. First listen to me then you can do whatever you want.
Smiley: Okay
Me: Good. You will go to Anna's security agency as a different person. Your friend, Avni, ask her to give you a new look. Then there is this interview which in Anna's company for a post of computer service engineer. I will prepare all your documents. Rajeev will interview you in Anna's cabin. When he will be interviewing you, I will call him outside and keep him busy for about half an hour. I will ask one of my friend in the company to hack the cameras in the cabin. You will open Anna's secret locker, You know where it is? Right?
Smiley: Yes, I know but I need to where gloves to open it, otherwise Baava (brother in law in kannada.) will not leave the one who touched it. Hey I also need his finger prints to open it. How will I get it?
Me: Go to his house and collect his finger print rest all I will take care.
Smiley: Can't you directly ask him about Siya's death information?
Me: You think he will give me info? Leave it. Where was I? Yeah, you will open the locker and take a clear photo of every document or proof in it. Then you will keep the thing as it is and close the door of the locker. Rajeev will come, sees your talent but you have to give him the worst performance. You will be rejected and then you will send me all the proof. This is the rough sketch of our plan. We will execute it on 28th of July because the interview is held on that day.
Smiley: Listening to plan I am shaking like a vibrator, during executing, I am damn sure I will be literally shaking. Okay , Now I should collect the finger print of Baava. Right?
Me: yes. I will tell you the details what to do with finger prints. Okay bye, I need to go.
I headed towards cutie who was eagerly waiting for me to show her wedding dress. My mind continuously wondered what was Anna talking about Siya.
"Miss. Murthy, My mother is inviting you today for dinner." I was now sitting on my desk and cutie took the half day for her wedding preparations. "Please sir it's family dinner, it would not be appropriate to me being there." I really wanted to taste the food of their house but I should give them privacy.
"No, it's not family dinner. My parents and my cousin is here, we are alone so mom invited you to say thank you for convincing Shika's father for giving her sometime. She says that you are the main reason why she is smiling now. Please don't decline the offer." When I heard bull head so lovingly I melted but when he said 'please' I couldn't help but take the offer. " okay" I said with a polite smile.

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