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judged to be in the form of a poetry / short story book
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THE COVER AND TITLE
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First off, I do feel that you could benefit more off of a better cover, the current aesthetic is neat but the cover, nonetheless, could be better.
SUMMARY
It says so much, yet so little and holy shit I love it.
the way you didn't use capitalisation here really works and complements the aesthetic.
GRAMMAR
I didn't find any grammatical errors such as punctuation or spelling errors etc
I do feel that you could use some more imagery in some instances when the reader is more constrained to the words to help them form those delicate, threads of pixels that can help them form a more vivid picture.
I also do know that your style consists of saying a lot of 'cause' but I do feel like it gets overly repeated sometimes.
STRUCTURE
The free style form that you used throughout this poetic, short story type pieces were an absolute pleasure to read omfg.
The paragraphs had good breaks to them and they had the right amount of words to them before cutting off into the next paragraph.
AKA STOP BEING PERFECT
AESTHETICS
The short parts and the depth to each and every single 'chapter' or more like piece in your book was so deep, simulating to think about which makes for a perfect 3 am read which is an aesthetic in its own.
We stan our fellow bredrin who loves a good existential crisis.
I feel like the angsty vibe that you wrote his book with defiantly shows and its amazing + its right up my alley.
The way that each piece is titled with a ' dear __ ' makes me feel some typa' way and idk what since I'm an unemotional piece of shit but BOI does it work.
I do although, feel that you could've incorporated the 'dear' that you use in each piece of the book either somewhere in the title or summary because I feel like its a significant element of your work. Incorporating this, can add to the unique-ness of your work.
OVERALL SCORE : 8.5/10
(note: your editing and attention to detail in your work is amazing so thanks for the smooth read, the only thing I would want to see more of is vivid imagery while also incorporating your style into that imagery. Plus get a new cover to add a layer of aesthetic. BUT YOUR WORK IS AMAZING AND UWU,, I WANNA READ MORE. Good luck on your book, Chloe )
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and when you update cause ya girl would like to read more tyvm
