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This is the devil. Over description. The devil likes to plague the author's mind making him/ her ruin their stories. And that devil loves to bother me, when I'm writing, unfortunately XD. And recently I read this really great story, the plotline was fascinating. But the awesome author kept on describing her main character's physical descriptions a litte too much. And sometimes, we add too much, making our great stories not- so- well- written. 

Fortunately, we can try to keep the devil from ruining our writing. XD Like just make sure, Awesomies, that you read over your writing and delete the "Bla bla colored eyes" to just "eyes" if it's repeated 6 million times. :)

Here is another example (also a ridonkulous story that's meant to make you laugh XD) :

Chapter One: 

As I run to my first class, my ugly wavy mud brown hair flowing, I can see how mad Mrs. Tackney will be if I'm late. Again! Like she's been mad already even if it's totally not my fault. That mean girl, Brenda, at my locker... Oh I hate her. I don't know when she'll stop, seriously! 

When I get to class, my emerald green eyes widen. Mrs. Tackney isn't here! It's just a sub. The sub ignores me, as I come in late. I sigh in relief.

"What's you name?" She asks me, suddenly walking over on her shiny red heels. She talks to me through her heavy coated lip sticked mouth while tapping her attendance clipboard with her magenta painted nails. 

"Oh I'm Juliette," I say in my melody filled voice. 

"Okay, well class, apparently Mrs. Tackney gave me a list of seat changes so today I will be switching your seats." She starts reading off the names on the list . Oh no, I start chewing my nails, I may not be sitting next my best friend, Alisa anymore. That's the worst thing that can happen.

"Alisa, you're next to Joe." The sub reads, Alisa grimaces, her perfect skinned face wrinkles, as she flicks her redish brown hair. She's so pretty, I feel so bad she's sitting next to Joe. The ugliest boy in the class. Poor Alisa! Her aqua blue eyes lock with mine.

"Hang in there." I mouth. 

"Juliette, next to Bryden." The sub's voice fills my ears. Did she just say Bryden!? My hot crush with long eyelashes, blond hair and greenish blue eyes takes the seat next to me. My pink lipped mouth hangs open, I cannot believe this. Alisa also hangs her mouth open. I immediately try to smoothen my waves with my fingers. Bryden smiles at me.

"Hey Julie." He says. Oh. My. God. He knows that I exsist! He just got one thing wrong.

"Oh uh... It's Juliette." I stammer. I talked in front of him!

"I know, I just want to give you a nickname."

Chapter Two:

I am literally crying with happiness when I reach my blue spray painted locker, I mean I think they used spray paint. I widen my emerald green eyes when I see Brenda's perfectly romantic curls blonde hair standing there, along with her proxies- best friends I mean.  

"Oh hey look, it's Juliette! Are your jeans clean today? Or are you just as usual..."

"Brenda shut up," I say. "Bryden talked to me today."

"Really?" I can see her hiding a laugh behind her full lips. I start to pull at my salmen colored shirt. It's a bad habit, and mom won't bring me to the mall to get better clothing.

"Yes and I think he loves me." I tell her, full of confidence. She angrily rushes over and kicks me.

"No! Juliette, Bryden is mine!"

"Nope, he's mine." I smirk at her. My lips are pretty thin though, and my cheeks are so chubby, I wish I can slim my face down. Bryden may like me more. The rest of my body is stick thin, while my face looks like a pumpkin. Why is Brenda so perfect?

Chapter Three:

I enter class, my ugly wavy mud brown hair flowing. When I see Bryden I smile wide at him. He leans over and kisses me. 

"Oh my god!!!! JULIEEEEE." I hear Alisa's pretty voice shriek. My emerald green eyes may as well pop out of my head. My stick thin arms wrap around his waist. Wait aren't the boy's arms supposed to be around my waist? Where do my hands go? I am such a bad kisser.

The end. 

I hope you guys found that story totally ridiculous. XD Remember not the let the devil }:),Over Description, ruin your beautiful writing, Awesomies. :)

And until my next rant, luv ya all <3, byeeeee. XD